视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct minor grammar and word choice errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds like “uh.”

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I photograph landscapes and local markets to remember special moments, and I often share a few of my favorite shots with friends online because they enjoy seeing them.

建議: Correct grammar and use linking words to connect reasons and examples. Reduce hesitations and combine ideas into one coherent response (max 5 sentences). Be specific about a particular scene or moment.

範例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy natural scenery such as mountains and rivers. For instance, photographing a sunset over a field makes me feel peaceful and refreshed, and I like the fresh air and quiet atmosphere of the countryside.

建議: Fix grammar and clarity, avoid fragmented phrases, and give one clear reason plus a specific example. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.” Remove unclear expressions such as “I only and is always remind me of my reward.”

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel more connected to the landscapes and culture. For example, I still have many regions I want to visit with my family, and travelling locally is usually easier and cheaper, so I can take more photos on short trips.

× I love capturing the beautiful picture whenever I travel.

✓ I love capturing beautiful pictures whenever I travel.

Use plural 'pictures' (or no article) when speaking generally about taking photos. 'The beautiful picture' implies a specific single picture, which is not intended. Use plural or no article for general statements.

× Taking photos helps me remember the special moments in the places and I really enjoy sharing my picture on social media with my friends.

✓ Taking photos helps me remember the special moments in places and I really enjoy sharing my pictures on social media with my friends.

Remove 'the' before 'places' when speaking generally. Use plural 'pictures' to match general sharing of multiple photos. 'My picture' suggests a single image; 'my pictures' is appropriate here.

× Uh, photography is a relaxing hobby for me.

✓ Photography is a relaxing hobby for me.

The sentence is grammatical but 'Uh,' is a filler. Removing it makes the sentence clearer and more fluent.

× I prefer the views in rural areas because I love the natural scenery like mountains, rivers or fields.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I love natural scenery like mountains, rivers, and fields.

Use plural 'views' for general preference and parallel list punctuation with 'and' before the final item. Omitting 'the' is more natural for general statements.

× Umm. It's feel much more peaceful and relaxing and I always feel a refresh whenever I take a photo of sunset.

✓ It feels much more peaceful and relaxing, and I always feel refreshed whenever I take a photo of a sunset.

Use 'it feels' (third person singular) not 'it's feel'. Use adjective 'refreshed' not noun 'a refresh'. Include article 'a' before 'sunset' when referring to a single instance; alternatively 'sunsets' works for general statements.

× I just enjoy the fresh air in the countryside.

✓ I just enjoy the fresh air in the countryside.

This sentence is correct. No change needed.

× Personally, I prefer the views in my own country because I feel more connected with the scenery here.

✓ Personally, I prefer the views in my own country because I feel more connected to the scenery here.

Use the preposition 'connected to' rather than 'connected with' in this context; both are possible but 'connected to' is more common. Sentence otherwise correct.

× There are many places I haven't explore yet and I only and is always remind me of my reward and family trips.

✓ There are many places I haven't explored yet, and they always remind me of my recent and family trips.

Use past participle 'explored' after 'haven't'. The original clause 'I only and is always remind me...' is ungrammatical and unclear. I changed to 'they always remind me' so the subject 'places' correctly matches the verb. 'Recent' or another adjective may be needed instead of 'reward' which seems incorrect here; I used 'recent' but if the speaker meant 'memories' or 'rewarding' they should choose the appropriate word.

× Plus it's more easier and cheaper to travel around.

✓ Plus it's easier and cheaper to travel around.

Do not use 'more' with comparative adjective 'easier'. Use either 'more easy' (rare) or the comparative 'easier'. Keep parallel comparative structure 'easier and cheaper'.

× There are many places I haven't explore yet and I only and is always remind me of my reward and family trips.

✓ There are many places I haven't explored yet, and they always remind me of family trips and rewards.

Original sentence had multiple structural problems: incorrect verb form 'explore' should be 'explored', awkward phrase 'I only and is always remind me' is ungrammatical. Recast sentence so subject 'places' links to verb 'remind' and use a clear object. Clarify intended meaning: if speaker meant 'they remind me of rewarding family trips', rephrase accordingly (e.g. 'they always remind me of rewarding family trips').