视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and shows personal feeling, but there are problems with repetition, hesitations and one long run-on sentence. To improve, make a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating phrases, reduce hesitations, and add one specific detail (what you like photographing or how it expresses you). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences and use a linking word if adding a reason.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different sceneries because it gives me a sense of creativity. For example, I like capturing coastal sunsets since the changing light helps me experiment with composition and colour.

建議: Good content and clear preference, but there are repetitions and a minor grammar issue ('rural area ones') and a repeated word. To improve, correct the noun phrase, avoid repeating words, and add a brief specific example of an urban scene you like to photograph. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word to connect the reason.

範例: I prefer urban views because cities feel more vibrant and offer more photographic opportunities. For instance, Bangkok’s street markets and festivals provide colourful scenes and interesting people to capture.

建議: Your answer communicates a clear preference and gives reasons, but there are tense errors ('gave' should be 'give'), an unfinished sentence at the end, and some redundancy. To improve, correct tense, finish the example cleanly, and limit to two to three concise sentences with a linking phrase. Add one specific example of a country or a dish or a historical site you enjoyed.

範例: I prefer travelling to other countries because they give me deeper insights into new cultures and traditions. For example, when I visited Japan I enjoyed trying regional dishes and visiting temples, which taught me a lot about local history.

× Yes, I do enjoy taking pictures of different scenery because it provides me lots of it provides me a sense of creativity so that when I'm taking pictures, I I can express myself through it.

✓ Yes, I do enjoy taking pictures of different scenery because it gives me a sense of creativity, so when I'm taking pictures I can express myself through them.

Errors: repeated fragment 'it provides me lots of it provides me', incorrect pronoun agreement 'it' for plural 'pictures', extra filler 'so that' and duplicated 'I'. Correction: remove repetition, use 'gives' for natural collocation 'gives me a sense of creativity', use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'pictures', and simplify the clause. Suggestion: read sentences aloud to catch repetitions and ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents.

× I prefer urban areas to rural area ones because cities feel more vibrant and the hustle and bustle of Bangkok gives gives me more opportunity to try new things such as cultural events and restaurants.

✓ I prefer urban areas to rural ones because cities feel more vibrant and the hustle and bustle of Bangkok give me more opportunities to try new things such as cultural events and restaurants.

Errors: 'rural area ones' mixes singular 'area' with 'ones' — use 'rural ones' or 'rural areas'; duplicate 'gives gives'; 'opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities' to match 'new things'. Subject-verb agreement: 'the hustle and bustle' is a compound subject treated as plural, so use 'give'. Suggestion: remove duplicates, match singular/plural forms, and ensure verbs agree with compound subjects.

× Personally, I prefer travelling in other countries rather than staying in my own because foreign countries gave me deeper insights into cultures and traditions that I haven't experienced before.

✓ Personally, I prefer travelling in other countries rather than staying in my own because foreign countries give me deeper insights into cultures and traditions that I haven't experienced before.

Error: past tense 'gave' conflicts with present preference 'prefer' and present perfect 'haven't experienced'. Use present tense 'give' to maintain consistent time reference. Suggestion: keep tense consistent within the sentence; use present when describing general truths or ongoing experiences.

× For example, I can enjoy trying different local cuisines and visiting historical sites, which was always.

✓ For example, I enjoy trying different local cuisines and visiting historical sites; this has always been the case.

Errors: sentence fragment 'which was always' is incomplete and unclear. 'I can enjoy' is awkward when describing habitual actions; use 'I enjoy'. Correction provides a complete clause 'this has always been the case' to express continuity. Suggestion: avoid fragments by ensuring relative clauses have clear antecedents and verbs; choose verb tense that matches habitual actions (simple present) or continued states (present perfect).