视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, umm) and correct verb forms and articles.

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing landscapes from different angles because it helps me capture unique perspectives. For example, I often wait for the golden hour to photograph a scene, as the light makes colors richer and gives a stronger emotional impact.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and linking words. Use correct grammar and natural phrases (e.g., “I prefer rural areas because…”). Avoid vague expressions like “replace one's mind.”

範例: I prefer rural areas because the air is fresher and the scenery is more peaceful. For instance, walking along a country lane lets me relax and notice small details like wildflowers and birdsong, which I rarely see in the city.

建議: Answer directly and give clear reasons without repetition or unclear phrases. Avoid unrelated expressions (e.g., “pray for my country”) and correct unclear words. Offer one or two concrete reasons and maybe a brief comparison to other countries.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because they are familiar and meaningful to me. For example, I enjoy visiting the coastal cliffs at sunset, which remind me of childhood trips, whereas foreign landscapes are beautiful but feel less personal.

× I like taking picture from different angles.

✓ I like taking pictures from different angles.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because it refers to multiple photos; also use preposition 'from' is correct. Use plural when speaking generally about repeated actions.

× Umm, it's a hobby of from my childhood.

✓ Umm, it's a hobby of mine from my childhood.

The phrase needs the possessive 'of mine' to show ownership and 'from my childhood' to indicate time. The original 'of from' is an incorrect sequence of preposition and determiner.

× I like to take picture whenever I saw a beautiful scenery in front of me and when I failed to catch a moment.

✓ I like to take pictures whenever I see a beautiful scene in front of me or when I fail to catch a moment.

Use present simple 'see' to match habitual action (like to take pictures). 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures'. 'Scenery' is a mass noun; use 'scene' for a specific view. Use 'or' instead of 'and' to connect alternative situations; use present tense 'fail' for habitual action.

× I prefer to be used in a rural area.

✓ I prefer to be in a rural area.

The reflexive passive 'to be used' is incorrect here. The speaker wants to express personal preference for location: use 'to be in'. 'Prefer to be in a rural area' correctly expresses preference.

× This is because rural areas scenery is very fresh and it can replace one's mind in case of me.

✓ This is because the scenery in rural areas is very fresh and it can relax my mind.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'scenery' when specifying it. 'Scenery in rural areas' is clearer phrasing. 'Replace one's mind in case of me' is unidiomatic; use 'relax my mind' to express calming effect.

× This is very natural to get relaxed by natural views so.

✓ It is natural to feel relaxed by natural views.

Change structure to 'It is natural to feel relaxed' for grammatical subject-verb complement. 'Get relaxed by natural views' is understandable but less formal; 'feel relaxed' is preferred.

× In my opinion, I prefer views in my own country, umm wing to OK winter.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer views in my own country, owing to our winters.

'Owing to' is the correct prepositional phrase to express reason; 'wing to OK winter' is unintelligible. Clarify intended meaning: if speaker meant 'because of the winters', use 'owing to our winters' or 'because of our winters'.

× Uh, I love my country so very much and our country as a queen of beauty all over the world.

✓ I love my country very much; I consider it a queen of beauty in the world.

Replace 'so very much' with 'very much' for concision. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join ideas. 'Our country as a queen of beauty all over the world' lacks verb—use 'I consider it' and 'in the world' is more natural than 'all over the world.'

× So I love, I love to pray for my country.

✓ So I love it; I often pray for my country.

Repeating 'I love' is redundant. Add object 'it' for clarity. Use 'often pray' if the speaker means they regularly pray; otherwise 'I pray for my country' is correct. This corrects sentence structure and clarifies meaning.