视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, reduce fillers, and give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (however, but, because) to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

範例: I don’t usually take many photos because I’m not a confident photographer. However, when I travel I take lots of pictures of iconic buildings and landmarks so I can remember the trip. For example, on my last vacation I photographed the city’s main square from different angles to capture its atmosphere.

建議: Make a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and correct grammar. Avoid repetition and incorrect collocations. Use linking words (because, so, for example) and precise vocabulary (countryside, natural scenery, beaches). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy natural scenery and quiet beaches. For example, as a diver I often choose coastal villages where I can relax and dive daily. Overall, rural settings help me unwind and enjoy outdoor activities.

建議: Answer directly, reduce fillers, and give a concise reason plus a specific example. Use comparative language correctly and avoid absolute statements. Include linking words (because, for example) to make the response coherent.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer landscapes my country lacks. For example, Thailand and the Philippines have many islands and excellent dive sites, so I usually travel there for diving holidays.

× I should no interest in taking photos.

✓ I should have no interest in taking photos.

The student used incorrect verb construction with the modal-like phrase 'should no'. The correct phrase is 'should have no interest' (use 'have' + noun) to express lack of interest. Suggestion: use 'should have no' or simply 'am not interested in'.

× But when things come to, you know, when I'm gonna trip, I would always take a lot of pictures from every beginning to the end, like some iconic buildings or some landmark.

✓ But when it comes to, you know, when I'm going on a trip, I always take a lot of pictures from beginning to end, like iconic buildings or landmarks.

Multiple issues: 'when things come to' is incorrect idiom — use 'when it comes to'. 'gonna' is informal and should be 'going on' for future/plan. 'would always' suggests conditional/habit in past; for habitual present use 'always take'. 'from every beginning to the end' is redundant; use 'from beginning to end'. 'some iconic buildings or some landmark' should be plural 'landmarks' or noncount 'an iconic building or a landmark'. Suggestion: use standard forms 'when it comes to', 'going on a trip', and simple present for habitual actions.

× I would definitely choose rural areas.

✓ I would definitely choose rural areas.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no preposition error. (No correction needed.)

× In fact, when every time I'm gonna trip, I would always choose to some nature scenery.

✓ In fact, whenever I go on a trip, I always choose natural scenery.

Problems: 'when every time' is redundant; use 'whenever'. 'gonna' is informal – use 'go on'. 'choose to some nature scenery' is incorrect collocation: choose + direct object (not 'choose to some'); 'nature scenery' is unidiomatic — use 'natural scenery' or 'scenic natural areas'. Also change 'would always' to 'always' for habitual choice. Suggestion: 'Whenever I go on a trip, I always choose natural scenery.'

× And you know, I'm actually a diver, so which means I would always go to a beach or something like that to have a vacation.

✓ And you know, I'm actually a diver, which means I always go to the beach or similar places for a vacation.

'so which means' is incorrect combination; use 'which means' or 'so it means'. 'would always go to a beach' should be present habitual 'always go to the beach'. Use 'the beach' or 'beaches' rather than 'a beach' when speaking generally; 'for a vacation' is more natural than 'to have a vacation'. Suggestion: use 'which means I always go to the beach for a vacation.'

× I think nature scenery is really starting.

✓ I think natural scenery is really stunning.

'nature scenery' is not a natural phrase; use 'natural scenery'. 'starting' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'stunning' (adjective meaning impressive) or 'refreshing'. Suggestion: use accurate adjectives like 'stunning', 'beautiful', or 'refreshing'.

× You know, Thailand has a lot of, uh, nature scenery and a lot of islands, which China doesn't have.

✓ You know, Thailand has a lot of natural scenery and many islands, which China doesn't have.

'nature scenery' should be 'natural scenery'. Also 'a lot of islands' can be better as 'many islands'. The relative clause 'which China doesn't have' is acceptable but could be clearer as 'which China has fewer of' if wanting to be precise. Suggestion: use 'natural scenery' and 'many islands'.

× So I would always go diving in Thailand or the Philippines.

✓ So I always go diving in Thailand or the Philippines.

Using 'would always' suggests conditional or past habit; since the speaker refers to regular present habit, use simple present 'always go diving'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions: 'I always go diving.'

× That's why I would always choose to travel abroad.

✓ That's why I always choose to travel abroad.

Again 'would always' implies conditional/past; change to simple present 'always choose' for habitual reason. Also 'choose to travel abroad' is acceptable, but remove 'to' after 'choose' when followed by infinitive is fine — 'choose to travel' is OK; here both forms work. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual tendencies.