视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds like “umm” and check verb forms and plural agreement (e.g., “pictures” and “moments”).

範例: Yes, I do. I take photos of beautiful views so I can remember them later, and I often share the best shots with my family. For example, I photographed a mountain sunset last year and looked at it whenever I wanted to relive that peaceful moment.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons linked clearly. Correct grammar (e.g., “make me feel peaceful”), avoid repetition, and use linking words such as “because” or “so”.

範例: I prefer rural views because I live in a busy city and the countryside makes me feel calm. For example, the fresh air and open fields help me relax on weekends, so I often go to nearby villages to enjoy the scenery.

建議: Answer directly and give a clear reason with specific examples. Avoid vague phrases and filler words. Use correct collocations (e.g., “old-fashioned”, “contains and preserves many historical sites”) and link ideas with words like “for example” or “because”.

範例: I prefer views in other countries, especially Europe, because the architecture and historical sites are very different from those in China. For example, I love walking through medieval towns in Europe where old streets and buildings are well preserved, which gives a unique atmosphere.

× Yes, of course, umm, because I think through picture, through record this beautiful view, I can remember it forever and to record this beautiful moments.

✓ Yes, of course, umm, because I think by taking pictures and recording these beautiful views, I can remember them forever.

Errors: incorrect verb forms and noun forms. 'through picture, through record' is ungrammatical; use gerund forms 'taking pictures' and 'recording' to express actions. 'this beautiful view' and 'this beautiful moments' conflict in number; use plural 'these beautiful views' and pronoun 'them'. Suggestion: use parallel gerund phrases connected with 'and' and match singular/plural nouns and pronouns.

× I like places in rural areas because I live in the urban area and that's but in rural area always make me very very peace and the view in rural is very clean and natural.

✓ I like places in rural areas because I live in an urban area, and being in the countryside always makes me feel very peaceful; the views in rural areas are very clean and natural.

Errors: wrong prepositions and articles. Use 'in an urban area' or 'in the city', and 'in the countryside' is more natural than 'in rural area'. 'make me very very peace' is incorrect: use 'makes me feel very peaceful'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'the view in rural is' should be 'the views in rural areas are'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('in'), articles ('an'), plural forms for general statements ('rural areas', 'views'), and the verb 'feel' after 'makes me'.

× I like places in rural areas because I live in the urban area and that's but in rural area always make me very very peace and the view in rural is very clean and natural.

✓ I like places in rural areas because I live in an urban area, and being in the countryside always makes me feel very peaceful; the views in rural areas are very clean and natural.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and noun form. 'in rural area always make me' uses plural verb 'make' with singular subject phrase; correct is 'being in the countryside always makes me'. 'the view in rural is' should be 'the views in rural areas are'. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their subjects and use plural nouns when speaking generally.

× Hmm. I really like the place in other countries, umm, for example Europe, because Europe is very different in China and Europe is very old fashioned, umm, And it's contained and preserved many, many old things, umm.

✓ Hmm. I really like places in other countries, for example in Europe, because Europe is very different from China and has many old-fashioned features, and it contains and preserves many old things.

Errors: incorrect preposition and tense/word choice. Use 'different from' not 'different in'. 'Place in other countries' should be plural 'places' or 'places in other countries'. 'Europe is very old fashioned' is okay but better as 'has many old-fashioned features'. 'It's contained and preserved many' is ungrammatical: use 'it contains and preserves many'. Suggestion: use correct comparative preposition 'different from', correct verb forms 'contains/preserves', and pluralize when speaking generally.