视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “angles” and “different views” overlap) and minor grammar errors (e.g., “Absolutely I am” → “Absolutely”).

範例: Yes, I do. Photography is one of my favourite hobbies, and when I travel I try different angles to capture unique perspectives. For example, I often wait for soft morning light because it makes colours richer, and then I share the best shots on my social media.

建議: Make a clear direct answer first (urban or rural), then give specific, coherent reasons. Use linking words (because, and, for example) and correct grammar. Keep to two to three sentences and avoid filler words and unfinished phrases.

範例: I prefer rural views because they feel more natural and peaceful. For example, I enjoy photographing rivers and mountains since the reflections and textures create more interesting compositions. Also, natural light in the countryside often makes colours look warmer.

建議: Answer directly whether you prefer domestic or foreign views, then give a concise specific reason and one brief example. Remove hesitations and repetitions. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct pronouns and fillers.

範例: I prefer taking photographs in other countries because different cities often offer unique architecture and light. For example, on a recent trip I photographed a skyline with high-rise buildings at sunset, and the contrast between glass towers and warm sky made the image striking.

× Absolutely I am.

✓ Absolutely.

The phrase 'Absolutely I am' is unnatural; 'am' is a first-person singular verb that lacks a complement here and causes awkwardness. Simply saying 'Absolutely' answers the question correctly. Suggestion: use short affirmative responses like 'Yes, absolutely.' or 'Absolutely.'

× when I travel I like to snap pictures using different angles and also different views.

✓ When I travel, I like to snap pictures from different angles and of different views.

The original uses 'using different angles' which is grammatically acceptable but awkward; 'from different angles' is the correct prepositional phrase to describe camera perspective. Also 'of different views' is clearer than 'different views' after 'angles.'

× I also like a lot of lighting when I'm taking my pictures because it helps the pictures look more beautiful.

✓ I also like a lot of light when I'm taking pictures because it helps them look more beautiful.

'Lighting' can be used, but 'a lot of light' is more natural here; 'pictures' repeated is redundant so 'them' replaces 'the pictures.' Use of plural pronoun improves cohesion.

× I also like to post them on my social media platforms with my friends.

✓ I also like to post them on my social media platforms for my friends to see.

The preposition 'with' wrongly implies posting together with friends. 'For my friends to see' correctly expresses the intended audience. Alternatively 'and share them with my friends' works.

× Honestly, I prepare am taking my pictures in rural areas is because it gives this natural look like.

✓ Honestly, I prefer taking my pictures in rural areas because they have a natural look.

Original has extra words 'prepare am' and misplaced structure. 'Prefer taking my pictures in rural areas' is the intended meaning; 'because they have a natural look' correctly links reason and subject.

× I also like the fact that there are lots of rivers because I prefer taking my pictures close to rivers and mountains and these are things that you can see in.

✓ I also like that there are many rivers, because I prefer taking pictures near rivers and mountains, which are common there.

Sentence had redundancy and an unfinished clause 'that you can see in.' Replaced with 'which are common there' to complete idea. Also 'lots of' changed to 'many' for formality; 'close to' changed to 'near.'

× I will I will say I prefer him snapping pictures in other countries like there was this time of travel that was umm.

✓ I would say I prefer taking pictures in other countries; for example, there was a trip some months ago...

Original contains repeated 'I will,' incorrect 'him snapping,' and fragmentary phrasing. 'I would say' is a natural hedging phrase; 'taking pictures' is correct for the subject. 'For example' introduces an anecdote.

× Some months ago I traveled to another country.

✓ Some months ago, I traveled to another country.

Sentence is correct grammatically; only missing comma after introductory phrase improves clarity. Past tense 'traveled' is appropriate to describe a past trip.

× I really enjoyed the view I got when I took a particular picture.

✓ I really enjoyed the view I captured in a particular picture.

'Got when I took' is colloquial; 'captured in' is more natural for photography context and concise.

× It was very beautiful because of the high rise buildings that were in the background and also the beautiful UMM.

✓ It was very beautiful because of the high-rise buildings in the background and the beautiful surroundings.

Use hyphen 'high-rise' as a compound adjective. Original 'beautiful UMM' seems to be filler 'umm'; replaced with 'surroundings' to convey intended meaning. Remove repetition of 'beautiful.'