视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct sentence structure: combine short fragments, avoid repetition, and use linking words to make your answer natural. Also add one brief specific example to make it vivid. Keep to no more than 4–5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially when I go trekking. For example, last year I took photos of sunrise over a mountain range and close-ups of wildflowers along the trail. I prefer landscapes to selfies because they capture the atmosphere and memories of the journey.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, so). Reduce repetition of words (e.g., 'love' and 'trekking') and correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'in rural areas' not 'in the rural areas').

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because I love being surrounded by nature. For example, when I go trekking I can photograph mountains, forests and wild animals, which are rarely found in cities. This makes each photo more unique and peaceful.

建議: Provide a concise topic sentence and one clear reason with an example. Avoid repeating 'so' and refine grammar (e.g., 'my country' not 'my countries', 'scenery' singular). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to improve coherence.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different scenery from what I'm used to at home. For example, traveling abroad I photographed coastal cliffs and tropical forests that I never see in my country, which made the experience more exciting and educational.

× When I'm traveling.

✓ When I'm traveling, I love to take photographs of landscapes.

This fragment lacks a main verb or complete clause; it is a sentence fragment. Combine it with the following clause to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: attach it to the next sentence or add a main clause so the sentence has subject and verb.

× I love to go trekking, so I love to take photographs of landscapes, mountains, hills, flowers, plants and animals that I encounter on the way.

✓ I love to go trekking, so I like taking photographs of landscapes, mountains, hills, flowers, plants, and animals that I encounter along the way.

Use of 'to take' is acceptable but 'like taking' fits natural collocation with 'love' and continuous actions; 'on the way' is better phrased as 'along the way'. Also add a serial comma for clarity and ensure parallel structure.

× Rather than taking picture of myself, I love to take pictures of the landscape.

✓ Rather than taking pictures of myself, I love to take pictures of landscapes.

'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match general habit, and 'the landscape' suggests a specific landscape; use plural 'landscapes' to match meaning. Also keep noun number consistent.

× I prefer views in the rural areas rather than urban areas because I love nature and I love to capture photograph of landscapes, hills, mountains, flowers and animals that I encounter on the trail when I am on trekking.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban areas because I love nature, and I like to capture photographs of landscapes, hills, mountains, flowers, and animals that I encounter on the trail when I am trekking.

Do not use 'the' before general plural 'rural areas' and 'urban areas'. 'Capture photograph' is missing plural and should be 'capture photographs' or 'take photographs'. 'On trekking' is nonstandard; use 'when I am trekking' or simply 'when I trek'. Also change 'I love to' to 'I like to' for variety; ensure plural forms and articles are correct.

× I prefer views in other countries to my own countries because I'm very much familiar with the landscapes of my country.

✓ I prefer views in other countries to those in my own country because I'm very familiar with the landscapes of my country.

Use singular 'country' to refer to the speaker's nation. Compare 'other countries' with 'my own country' (singular). Use 'those in' to avoid repeating 'views'. Also 'very much familiar' is awkward; use 'very familiar'.

× So whenever I am traveling abroad, the landscapes, the sceneries are very different from that of my country.

✓ Whenever I travel abroad, the landscapes and sceneries are very different from those in my country.

Avoid starting sentences repeatedly with 'So' in formal speech. Use 'whenever I travel abroad' (simple present for habitual action). 'The sceneries' should be 'scenery' or 'sceneries' without repeated 'the'; use parallel 'landscapes and sceneries'. 'Different from that of my country' is unclear: use 'different from those in my country'.

× So I love to explore the new kind of nature.

✓ So I love to explore new kinds of nature.

'The new kind of nature' is awkward and uncountable; pluralize to 'new kinds of nature' or say 'new natural landscapes'. Omit unnecessary 'the' and adjust noun form to express variety.