视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên, ngữ pháp và mạch lạc: trả lời trực tiếp, tránh tiếng ằ, lặp từ, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (chủ ngữ-động từ), dùng câu hỗ trợ ngắn gọn và cụ thể. Ví dụ: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cho 1-2 chi tiết và lý do. Hạn chế tối đa 3-4 cụm lời thừa như "so that it can request it" và thay bằng lý do rõ ràng.

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different scenes because it helps me preserve memories. For example, I often take photos when I travel or during special family moments, so I can look back on them later.

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và độ chính xác của từ vựng: sửa các lỗi về thì, trật tự từ và nghĩa (ví dụ "I'm a person who is prefer" -> "I prefer"). Tránh từ không rõ nghĩa như "their thing" hoặc "Aussie moments"; sử dụng lý do cụ thể và liên kết bằng từ nối như "because" và "so" một cách chính xác. Giữ câu ngắn gọn, tối đa 2-3 câu.

範例: I prefer rural views because they are usually quieter and more peaceful. For instance, I like hiking in the countryside where I can relax and enjoy natural scenery without city noise.

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, lựa chọn từ và tính súc tích: loại bỏ lỗi như "eats preferred" và cấu trúc sai "they think they are a much different"; dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: "I prefer" + lý do cụ thể. Tránh câu rời rạc; dùng liên từ hợp lý (because, so) và đưa ví dụ cụ thể để minh họa.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they often look very different from what I'm used to and I can learn about different cultures. For example, visiting Japan allowed me to photograph unique landscapes and traditional architecture, which was a memorable experience.

× Yes of course, like I am person who is appreciated all the moments of my life so I want to umm capture the pictures of as much as possible of a different views so that it can request it.

✓ Yes, of course. I am a person who appreciates all the moments of my life, so I want to capture as many pictures of different views as possible so I can revisit them.

The sentence has multiple adjective/adverb and word-formation errors: 'I am person' needs an article and noun agreement ('a person'); 'is appreciated' is incorrect passive/adjective use—should be active 'appreciates'; 'capture the pictures of as much as possible of a different views' is ungrammatical: use 'capture as many pictures of different views as possible'; 'so that it can request it' is unclear and unnatural—use 'so I can revisit them'. Suggestion: simplify the sentence into shorter clauses, use correct articles, use active verbs, and use 'as many' with countable nouns.

× Maybe I'm a person who is prefer the views in rural areas because in their thing views will be more peaceful and so calming and is somewhere I can unwind in or relax myself in Aussie moments of life.

✓ Maybe I'm a person who prefers the views in rural areas because those views are more peaceful and calming, and they are somewhere I can unwind and relax in during moments of my life.

Pronoun and verb form errors: 'is prefer' combines auxiliary and main verb incorrectly; use simple present 'prefers' to match subject. 'their thing views' is incorrect pronoun and extra word—use 'those views' or 'the views'; 'will be' is unnecessary modal/time mismatch—use present 'are'; 'is somewhere I can unwind in or relax myself in' has wrong verb form and reflexive pronoun—use 'somewhere I can unwind and relax' and avoid unnecessary 'myself'. Also 'Aussie moments of life' is unclear; changed to 'during moments of my life'. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb agreement, choose appropriate pronouns ('those' for plural), remove redundant words, and avoid unnecessary reflexive pronouns.

× I am person who eats preferred views in other countries because they think they are a much different from my country and so I can learn new things and see more picturesque views.

✓ I am a person who prefers views in other countries because I think they are very different from my country, and I can learn new things and see more picturesque scenery.

Pronoun and verb choice errors: 'I am person' needs article 'a person'; 'eats preferred' is nonsense—should be 'prefer' (present tense). 'they think' incorrectly uses 'they'—the speaker should use 'I think'. 'a much different' is incorrect article/adjective use—use 'very different' or 'quite different'. 'picturesque views' is acceptable but 'picturesque scenery' is more natural. Suggestion: use correct article, correct verb 'prefer(s)' for subject, use 'I think' for personal opinion, and choose appropriate modifiers ('very different').

× So that would be a worth experience.

✓ So that would be a worthwhile experience.

Article and adjective use: 'a worth experience' is ungrammatical—'worth' is not used directly before a noun; use the adjective 'worthwhile' or the structure 'worth the experience'. Also keep the indefinite article 'a' with 'worthwhile'. Suggestion: use 'worthwhile' to modify 'experience' or rephrase as 'It would be worthwile'.