视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your response: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons with simple linking words. Avoid repetition and speaking hesitations. Also use correct collocations (e.g., “capture them in my camera” or “capture them in a frame”) and watch grammar (e.g., articles and noun forms).

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me preserve memories. For example, when I photograph a sunset or a city skyline, I can later look at the picture and remember the moment. Besides, taking photos makes me feel calm and satisfied.

建議: Answer directly and correct vocabulary and grammar: say ‘rural areas’ not ‘real areas’, use singular/plural correctly, and simplify sentence structure. Use a linking phrase (e.g., ‘because’ or ‘for example’) and give one concrete detail about what you like to capture. Reduce hesitations and repetitive words.

範例: To be honest, I prefer views in rural areas because they offer natural landscapes. For example, I like to photograph rolling hills and small rivers because the light and colors change throughout the day, and those images bring back strong memories and a sense of calm.

建議: Be polite and avoid negative or absolute statements about your country. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason and an example. Use proper grammar (e.g., ‘my country is’, ‘other countries have’), and a linking phrase such as ‘because’ or ‘for example’.

範例: I tend to prefer photographing views in other countries because I find their scenery more varied. For example, when I visited Japan I photographed unique coastal cliffs and temples that are different from the landscapes at home, and I enjoyed sharing those photos with my friends and family.

× Yes, yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because I feel every every time I take pictures of them I have, I feel like I have captured them inside my own little wall.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because every time I take photos I feel like I have captured them in my own little world.

The sentence contains a repeated word 'every' and redundant phrases 'I have, I feel' that disrupt sentence structure (Sentence structure errors - ID 26). Replace repetitions and combine clauses for clarity; use 'world' instead of 'wall' which is likely a word choice error but handled here by improving meaning. Suggestion: remove duplicates and streamline clauses (e.g., 'every time I take photos, I feel...').

× And those different views also give me a tons of feelings that I can even describe those deep feelings and feel making me feel pleasant of all Relax, that's why.

✓ Those different views also give me many deep feelings that I cannot fully describe, and they make me feel relaxed and pleasant.

Use of 'a tons of' is incorrect; the correct quantifier is 'many' or 'a ton of' (ID 14). The sentence also has poor structure and repetition ('feel' repeated) which was simplified. Suggestion: use 'many' for countable plural or 'a lot of' and avoid repeating verbs; break into clearer clauses. (Note: primary error corrected was quantifier misuse and sentence structure.)

× If I'll be honest, I prefer views in real areas because most of rural areas have a natural landscapes and I like to capture a movement of them inside inside my camera and I keep it to look back on later.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in rural areas because most rural areas have natural landscapes, and I like to capture moments in my camera to look back on later.

'If I'll be honest' is incorrect English; use 'To be honest' or 'If I'm honest' (future tense misuse - ID 7 and sentence structure ID 26). 'Real areas' is wrong word choice; 'rural areas' is intended. 'Most of rural areas' is ungrammatical; use 'most rural areas' (article/quantifier issue ID 22). 'A natural landscapes' mixes singular article with plural noun; should be 'natural landscapes' (singular/plural issue ID 1). 'A movement of them' is awkward; 'moments' fits context. Also removed duplicate 'inside'. Suggestion: use set phrase 'To be honest', match plural nouns with no singular article, and streamline for clarity.

× Uh, landscapes and landscape scenes of an enrolled strong emotions and memory for me, which I find relaxing and satisfying.

✓ Landscapes and landscape scenes evoke strong emotions and memories for me, which I find relaxing and satisfying.

The original has incorrect article 'an' with 'enrolled', which seems to be a wrong word choice and causes sentence structure problems (article errors ID 22 and sentence structure ID 26). 'Enrolled' is incorrect here; correct verb is 'evoke'. Also 'memory' should be plural 'memories' to match 'emotions' (singular/plural issue ID 1). Suggestion: use 'evoke' to express causing feelings and ensure noun number agreement. (Note: primary issues corrected were article misuse and plural agreement.)

× To be honest, I prefer views in other countries because my countries is, uh, kind of boring for me.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in other countries because my country is kind of boring to me.

'My countries is' is incorrect: 'countries' is plural while the possessive should be singular 'country' to match singular verb 'is' (singular/plural issue ID 1 and subject-verb agreement ID 27). Also use 'to me' rather than 'for me' for personal opinion emphasis. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches the intended meaning and that subject and verb agree.

× And I feel other countries has more beautiful landscape.

✓ And I feel other countries have more beautiful landscapes.

'Other countries has' is incorrect because 'countries' is plural and requires the plural verb 'have' (third person singular issue ID 2 and subject-verb agreement ID 27). 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' because it refers generally to multiple places (singular/plural issue ID 1). Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and plural nouns when referring to multiple items.

× And I think if I capture them with my camera, I can show that back, show them back to my people in my own country.

✓ And I think if I capture them with my camera, I can show the photos to people in my country.

The sentence has awkward pronoun reference and redundancy ('show that back, show them back') causing sentence structure errors (ID 26) and unclear pronoun use (ID 12). 'My people in my own country' is wordy; 'people in my country' is clearer. Suggestion: replace vague pronouns with specific nouns like 'photos' and remove redundant phrases.