视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitations and repetition, make a clear topic sentence, and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid filler words.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I often photograph sunsets and city skylines to preserve memories and share them with friends. I find photography helps me notice small details I would otherwise miss.

建議: Eliminate fillers and repetitions, use a clear topic sentence, and give specific reasons with linking words (for example, because / therefore). Use varied vocabulary to avoid repeating words like "fresh" and "relaxing."

範例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy photographing natural landscapes like mountains, rivers and open fields. For example, sunsets over a river feel peaceful and provide interesting light for photos, so I often plan shoots around golden hour.

建議: Make the response more concise and add a brief specific example or contrast using linking words (however / for instance). Avoid repetition and small grammatical errors (each has, sometimes I).

範例: I like both local and foreign views because each has unique charms. For instance, at home I photograph familiar landscapes more often, while when I travel abroad I focus on architecture and cultural scenes to capture new perspectives.

× Taking pictures helps me to remember special moments and places and I also enjoy sharing my photos on on on social media with friends.

✓ Taking pictures help me remember special moments and places, and I also enjoy sharing my photos on social media with friends.

Repeated 'on' is an error; also 'helps me to remember' can be 'help me remember' but that changes subject-verb agreement—here subject 'Taking pictures' is a gerund phrase treated as singular, so 'helps' is acceptable; however, keeping natural phrasing 'help me remember' is also common. The main correction removes repeated preposition and tightens phrasing: remove duplicate 'on' and unnecessary 'to'. Suggestion: avoid repeating prepositions and use 'on social media' for the platform.

× Such as any special moment like sunset and photographing is a.

✓ For example, I like to photograph special moments such as sunsets.

Original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. 'Such as' cannot start a sentence alone; 'photographing is a' is incomplete. Correct by making a complete clause: introduce 'For example' and use plural 'sunsets' when speaking generally. Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a subject and verb and avoid sentence fragments.

× I love capturing natural views such as environments, uh, mountains, fields and rivers.

✓ I love capturing natural views, such as mountains, fields, and rivers.

The word 'environments' is vague and unnecessary when specific examples follow; commas improve clarity. Pronoun 'such as' should be followed by clear nouns. Suggestion: remove filler words and unnecessary nouns and use commas to separate items.

× Uh it it it's much more relaxing and peaceful rather than cities and I enjoy taking the sunset photographs and I feel more refreshing and fresh.

✓ It's much more relaxing and peaceful than cities, and I enjoy taking sunset photographs because they make me feel refreshed.

Multiple issues: repeated fillers ('uh it it it's'), incorrect comparative structure 'rather than cities' should be 'than cities', awkward phrase 'I feel more refreshing and fresh' (refreshing describes something, not the speaker). Use 'refreshed' (adjective describing the speaker's state). Suggestion: remove repetitions and fillers, use 'than' for comparisons, and choose correct adjectives ('refreshed').

× To be honest, I prefer both in local and foreign views because each have their own unique charms.

✓ To be honest, I prefer both local and foreign views because each has its own unique charm.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun issues: 'each' is singular and should take singular verb 'has' and singular possessive 'its'. Also 'both in local and foreign views' is awkward; 'both local and foreign views' is correct. Suggestion: use 'each has its own' and avoid unnecessary prepositions.

× So I sometime I prefer to capture photos in my familiar scenario.

✓ So sometimes I prefer to capture photos in familiar settings.

'Sometime' should be plural 'sometimes'. 'Scenario' is misused; 'setting' or 'surroundings' is appropriate. Also remove repeated 'I'. Suggestion: use adverb 'sometimes' and choose the correct noun 'settings' for places or situations.