视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise, avoid fillers (uh) and minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and an example. Use varied but appropriate vocabulary (e.g., scenes, moments) and keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different scenes because I love capturing interesting moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and street scenes when the light looks especially beautiful, which helps me practice composition and color.

建議: Answer directly, correct grammar and reduce redundancy. Use linking words to contrast urban and rural views and give specific sensory details. Keep sentences concise and avoid hesitation sounds.

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because cities tend to have tall buildings, traffic noise, and pollution. In contrast, rural areas offer clear views of mountains, rivers, and green fields, which feel more peaceful and photogenic.

建議: Be precise and correct grammatical mistakes (states, climates). Provide a clear reason and a short example to support your preference. Use linking words like because and for example to improve coherence.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many states with diverse cultures and climates. For example, I can find coastal scenery in one region and mountainous landscapes in another, so there is always something new to explore.

× I'm keen in photography.

✓ I'm keen on photography.

Use 'keen on' + noun or gerund. 'Keen in' is incorrect preposition collocation. Replace 'in' with 'on' to express interest or enthusiasm.

× I used to capture, uh, whenever I feel the scenario is pleasant and good.

✓ I take pictures whenever I feel the scene is pleasant and attractive.

'Used to' indicates a past habit and conflicts with 'whenever I feel' (present). Also 'capture' can be replaced by 'take pictures' in this context; 'scenario' and 'pleasant and good' are awkward. Use present simple 'I take' for habitual action and 'scene' for scenery; 'attractive' is a clearer adjective.

× Most of the urban areas will have the structural building, pollution, traffic, etcetera.

✓ Most urban areas have large buildings, pollution, traffic, etcetera.

'Structural building' is unidiomatic and mixes singular/plural. Use plural 'buildings' and present simple 'have' for general facts rather than 'will have'. 'Most of the urban areas' can be simplified to 'Most urban areas'.

× But when it comes to rural areas, there will be a beautiful scenarios, uh, like mountain, rivers, uh, greenery, uh, agricultural land which is pleasant for ice.

✓ But when it comes to rural areas, there are beautiful scenes such as mountains, rivers, greenery, and agricultural land, which are pleasant to see.

Use present 'there are' for general descriptions rather than 'there will be'. 'A beautiful scenarios' mixes singular and plural; use 'beautiful scenes' or 'beautiful scenery'. List nouns in plural where appropriate ('mountains', 'rivers') and use 'pleasant to see' rather than 'pleasant for ice' which is unclear.

× I prefer views in my own country because our country has different state with different culture and different climatic condition.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because our country has different states with different cultures and different climatic conditions.

Use plural 'states', 'cultures', and 'climatic conditions' to match 'different'. Also 'in my own country' is correct but 'different state' should be 'different states'. Use plural nouns to agree with 'different'.

× So it is more to explore in in my country rather than going to view in other countries.

✓ So there is more to explore in my country than in other countries.

Avoid repeating 'in'. Use the fixed expression 'there is more to explore' and compare with 'than in other countries'. 'Going to view' is unnatural here; use 'explore' or 'see'.