视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and coherent: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fragmented or irrelevant phrases, and give specific supporting details using linking words. Aim for 2–4 short sentences, mention why you enjoy photographing views (memories, creativity, sharing) and give one concrete example.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me capture memories and details I might forget. For example, when I visit the coast I photograph the light and textures of the water so I can remember the atmosphere later. I also sometimes share my best shots with friends on social media.

建議: Respond directly and contrast clearly: state your preference, then explain reasons with coherent linking words (e.g., "but", "because", "however"). Avoid unclear or irrelevant phrases. Give specific examples of what you like in each setting (e.g., city skylines, rural fields) and one brief reason for choice.

範例: I like both, but I prefer rural areas because they create a calm mood and wide open views. In cities I enjoy interesting architecture and busy streets, but in the countryside I can photograph fields, mountains, and peaceful light which feel more relaxing.

建議: Answer directly and provide clear, specific reasons. Start with a topic sentence stating your preference, then give 1–2 supporting details and an example. Avoid vague words like "every floor" and unclear phrases such as "invite guide." Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

範例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many natural attractions like mountains and scenic parks that feel peaceful. For example, I often visit a nearby national park to photograph waterfalls and forest trails, which help me relax and appreciate the landscape.

× I like taking pictures of different views because they have.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because they capture memories.

The original sentence ends with 'they have' which is incomplete and unclear; this is a sentence structure error. Replace the fragment with a complete clause that matches context. Suggestion: use a verb phrase such as 'capture memories' to explain why the student likes taking pictures.

× Need control special weapons.

✓ I need control over the camera's settings.

This fragment lacks a subject and clear object, causing a sentence structure error. 'Need' requires a subject and a clear object; based on context (photography), 'control over the camera's settings' is a coherent correction.

× And so say that is my friend in the social media.

✓ And I can say that they are my friends on social media.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and missing subject-verb agreement and correct preposition; it's a sentence structure error. Correct by supplying a subject 'I', proper verb 'can say', plural 'friends' if referring to multiple, and preposition 'on' for social media.

× I like both of them and rural area because it suits a different mood.

✓ I like both urban and rural areas because each suits a different mood.

The phrase 'both of them and rural area' misuses quantifiers and nouns; this is an incorrect use of quantifiers. Replace with 'both urban and rural areas' and use plural 'areas' with 'each' to match 'suits a different mood.'

× Open areas offer lively stress and interesting architecture.

✓ Open areas offer lively streets and interesting architecture.

The word 'stress' is likely a wrong word choice causing a sentence structure/confusion error. 'Streets' makes sense with 'open areas' and 'interesting architecture.' Choose correct vocabulary to match meaning.

× Architecture when I want convenient, while rural Europe fly pitfalls.

✓ I prefer urban architecture when I want convenience, while rural areas have peaceful landscapes.

This sentence has multiple errors: incorrect prepositions and nonsense phrases ('fly pitfalls'), classified as incorrect use of prepositions and sentence structure. Rephrase to 'prefer urban architecture when I want convenience' and correct second clause to 'rural areas have peaceful landscapes.'

× Umm, every floor feels in my own country because we have many beautiful natural attractions such as mountains and scenic parks.

✓ Umm, I feel most comfortable in my own country because we have many beautiful natural attractions such as mountains and scenic parks.

'Every floor feels' is incorrect pronoun/word choice and sentence structure. This is an incorrect use of pronouns/expressions. Replace with 'I feel most comfortable' to express preference clearly.

× These places are peaceful and relaxing, so I enjoy visiting them to invite guide.

✓ These places are peaceful and relaxing, so I enjoy visiting them and sometimes I join guided tours.

'To invite guide' is ungrammatical; this is a sentence structure error. Provide a natural expression such as 'join guided tours' or 'hire a guide' depending on intended meaning; here 'join guided tours' fits well.