视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và phát âm, dùng số ít/ số nhiều đúng (picture -> pictures, view -> views), động từ chia đúng (make -> makes). Giảm tiếng nặng (umm) và rút gọn câu để tự nhiên hơn; thêm liên từ để mạch lạc (for example, because, so). Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn về tần suất hoặc địa điểm để phong phú nội dung.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially natural scenes because they make me feel peaceful. For example, I often photograph the sea at sunrise and sunset when the light is most beautiful. I usually go to the nearby beach twice a month to capture those moments.

建議: Sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp (and -> in, smoothies -> skylines or streets, make -> makes). Tránh câu mơ hồ; tổ chức ý rõ ràng: đưa ra lựa chọn trực tiếp, sau đó giải thích với ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng liên từ để nối ý và giới thiệu ví dụ chính xác (for example, such as).

範例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy modern architecture and lively streets. For example, I like visiting squares and open-air cafés where street performances happen; these places make the city feel vibrant and energetic.

建議: Giảm tiếng tạm (umm), sửa ngữ pháp (place -> places, make -> makes), hoàn thiện câu không để dang dở. Cung cấp lý do cụ thể hơn (ví dụ: phong cảnh, kiến trúc, ẩm thực) và dùng liên từ để liên kết ý (because, so, therefore).

範例: I enjoy views in both my own country and abroad because I love discovering places I have never seen before. Exploring new landscapes and cultures excites me, and I especially enjoy comparing local architecture and food when I travel.

× I really like taking picture, especially nature view UMM because it make me feel more peaceful, more comfortable.

✓ I really like taking pictures, especially nature views, because they make me feel more peaceful and more comfortable.

'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because taking is a general activity involving multiple items. 'nature view' should be 'nature views' to match plural. 'it make' is subject-verb agreement: replace 'it' with 'they' to refer to 'nature views' and use 'make' -> 'make' remains but with 'they' as subject; here 'they make'. Remove filler 'UMM' and use commas to separate clauses; use 'and' instead of an extra comma before 'more comfortable'. Suggestions: use plural nouns for general activities, ensure pronoun agrees with antecedent, remove fillers in speaking transcripts.

× I often take photos of the sea like the sunrise and sunset because it's very beautiful.

✓ I often take photos of the sea, such as the sunrise and sunset, because they are very beautiful.

'it's' (it is) incorrectly refers to plural concepts 'sunrise and sunset'; use plural pronoun 'they are'. Also 'like' is informal; 'such as' is clearer. Ensure pronoun number matches the nouns it refers to.

× I prefer views and urban areas because I enjoy the smoothies and modern architecture.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the atmospheres and modern architecture.

Original uses 'and' incorrectly: 'views and urban areas' is confusing; change to 'views in urban areas'. 'the smoothies' is incorrect; likely meant 'the smoothies' is wrong context—replace with 'the atmosphere(s)' or 'the shops/cafes' depending on meaning. Here 'atmospheres' fits. Ensure correct noun choice and preposition 'in' for location.

× For example I like being in forest square or on concerts in a coffee just about streets performance.

✓ For example, I like being in public squares, going to concerts, or having coffee while watching street performances.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Reordered and clarified: 'forest square' -> 'public squares' or 'parks/squares'; 'on concerts in a coffee' is incorrect prepositions and noun uses. Use parallel gerunds: 'being', 'going', 'having' and correct noun phrases 'coffee while watching street performances' to convey intended meaning.

× It make the city feel life.

✓ It makes the city feel alive.

Subject-verb agreement: 'It make' should be 'It makes' (third person singular). 'feel life' is incorrect collocation; use adjective 'alive' to describe the city. Suggest practice with verb forms and common adjective collocations.

× I prefer views in all countries because I enjoy visiting place that I have never been to before.

✓ I prefer views in all countries because I enjoy visiting places that I have never been to before.

Use plural 'places' to match general meaning. 'visiting place that I have never been to before' needs plural and correct relative clause. Preposition 'to' at end is acceptable but ensure plurality.

× Umm exploring any place umm exploring new space make me feel excited and I like learning about different culture, different scenery and.

✓ Exploring new places makes me feel excited, and I like learning about different cultures and seeing different scenery.

Remove fillers 'Umm'; ensure subject-verb agreement: 'exploring... makes' (singular gerund subject takes singular verb). Use plural 'places', 'cultures', and complete the list instead of ending with 'and.' Reorder to parallel structure: 'learning about different cultures and seeing different scenery.'