视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and use natural phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons using correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid awkward or incorrect idioms (e.g., “assault”) and fix grammar (e.g., verb forms and articles). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: No, I don't usually take many pictures. When I visit mountains I prefer to enjoy the scenery and fresh air rather than stop to photograph it, because I find it more relaxing. However, I sometimes take one or two photos to remember the view.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and then one clear, specific reason with a linking word. Correct common errors (use 'prefer rural areas to urban areas', 'less crowded', 'fresh air') and avoid repetition. Limit to 2–3 sentences and include a concrete example or comparison.

範例: I prefer rural areas to urban areas. Because I lived in busy Delhi, I appreciate the calm and fresh air in my village; for example, walking through green fields and seeing crops helps me relax much more than noisy city streets.

建議: Answer directly and clearly. Use correct collocations ('views in my own country'), correct tense and grammar, and avoid unclear phrases ('it was it holds', 'sold out'). Give one or two specific reasons and possibly one brief example or personal memory. Keep it concise and coherent with linking words.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I haven't traveled abroad and I feel more familiar with local landscapes. For instance, I can enjoy diverse climates at home, from beaches to mountains, and many places remind me of happy childhood memories.

× To be honest, I am not a photographer guy like I when I travel to mountains, I like to feel and enjoy the moment and feel the fresh air coming in my mouth and face.

✓ To be honest, I am not a photographer; when I travel to the mountains, I like to feel and enjoy the moment and the fresh air on my face.

The sentence has unclear and incorrect pronoun and word usage ('guy like I' is wrong) and awkward phrasing. Replace 'guy like I' with a concise clause 'I am not a photographer' and use a semicolon to join related ideas. Use 'the mountains' with the definite article and 'fresh air on my face' for natural English. Also remove redundant 'feel' before 'the fresh air'. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× So I feel a little bit assault to stop and take picture of it.

✓ So I feel a little bit uncomfortable stopping to take a picture of it.

The original incorrectly uses 'assault' as an adjective and mixes infinitive forms. Use an appropriate adjective 'uncomfortable' and the gerund 'stopping' after 'feel ... uncomfortable' and include the article 'a' before 'picture'. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× I just leave the moment.

✓ I just let the moment pass.

'Leave the moment' is not idiomatic. Use a verb phrase that conveys allowing an experience to continue without interrupting it: 'let the moment pass'. This corrects collocation and meaning. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I prefer using rural area rather than urban area since I started to live in Delhi urban area.

✓ I prefer rural areas to urban areas because I started living in Delhi, an urban area.

Use plural 'areas' for general preference (singular/plural and article issues). Use 'prefer X to Y' structure (not 'rather than' after 'prefer' in this context), and 'because' for reason. Use gerund 'living' after 'started'. Add commas and article for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× When I go to my village at rural area, I like to work through the crops, green crops to feel the movement and feel fresh air because it is very less crowded and the greenery helps me to stay calm.

✓ When I go to my village in the rural area, I like to walk among the green crops to feel the breeze and fresh air because it is much less crowded, and the greenery helps me stay calm.

Use 'in the rural area' not 'at rural area'. 'Work through the crops' is wrong; 'walk among' or 'walk through' is appropriate. 'Feel the movement' is unclear—'feel the breeze' fits. Use 'much less crowded' and remove unnecessary 'to' in 'helps me stay calm'. Adjust articles and word order for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I prefer visual in my own country rather than other country.

✓ I prefer sights in my own country to those in other countries.

'Visual' is a noun/adjective incorrectly used; 'sights' or 'views' is correct. Use plural 'other countries' and the comparative structure 'prefer A to B'. Use 'those' to refer back to 'sights'. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Since I have not traveled to other countries, I don't know about them, but in my country I there are all the weathers and all the climates, so I can enjoy all of them.

✓ Since I have not traveled to other countries, I don't know them, but in my country there are all kinds of weather and climates, so I can enjoy them all.

Remove redundant 'about' after 'know'. 'I there are' is ungrammatical—place 'there' before 'are'. Use 'all kinds of weather' and 'enjoy them all' for natural English. Maintain present perfect for 'have not traveled' and simple present for general truths. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× And it was it holds a very good memory of me since I sold out so I like to live there.

✓ It also holds very good memories for me because I grew up there, so I like living there.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear: 'it was it holds' is redundant; 'sold out' is wrong in this context. Likely intended meaning is 'grew up' or 'lived there before'. Use 'holds memories for me' or 'holds very good memories' and 'I like living there'. Use 'because' to explain reason and correct verb tense and collocations. Grammar problem type ID: 26