视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatical, concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms, articles and plural nouns, and avoid filler sounds (umm).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. When I was 15 I became very interested in photography, and at 24 I bought my own camera and took a short photography course to improve my skills.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with concise, specific reasons and a linking word. Fix singular/plural and redundancy (remove repeated phrases).

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because I live in a big city and find nature very calming. For example, when I return to the countryside I enjoy quiet walking paths and wide-open landscapes that help me relax.

建議: Give a direct answer first, then briefly explain with specific examples and use linking words. Correct phrasing (e.g. "I haven't seen yet", "when I travel abroad"). Avoid repetition.

範例: I would choose both. In Vietnam there are many beautiful places I haven't seen yet, such as Ha Long Bay, and when I travel abroad I also discover stunning landscapes, like the Swiss Alps, so it's difficult to choose one over the other.

× I like take a very like taking picture of different view.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the gerund form 'taking' (Grammar problem type 8). Also pluralize 'pictures' and 'views' to match general reference (Grammar problem type 1). Suggestion: use 'like taking' and plural nouns when speaking generally.

× When I was 15 I very keen on umm photographing and I have my own camera when I was like 24 and I also joined a very small classes about taking picture.

✓ When I was 15 I was very keen on photographing. I got my own camera when I was about 24, and I also joined a very small class about taking pictures.

Multiple issues: missing past-tense verb 'was' after 'I' (Grammar problem type 6 present tense issue converted to past) and use of present tense 'have' instead of past 'got' (Grammar problem type 5). Use singular 'class' instead of 'classes' with 'a' (Grammar problem type 1/article error 22). 'Pictures' should be plural (Grammar problem type 1). Suggestions: ensure verbs agree with past time markers, use 'was' for states in past, 'got' or 'had' for possession in past, and match singular/plural with articles.

× Uh, I would prefer view in rural area for my personal experience.

✓ Uh, I would prefer views in rural areas based on my personal experience.

Use plural nouns 'views' and 'rural areas' for general preference (Grammar problem type 1). Preposition 'in' is fine but 'based on' better expresses reason (Grammar problem type 11). Suggestion: say 'prefer X in Y' or 'prefer X in Y based on my personal experience'.

× I live in a big city so for me nature is very healing things for me.

✓ I live in a big city, so nature is very healing for me.

Redundant phrase 'for me' repeated and incorrect plural 'things' after 'healing' (Grammar problem type 13). 'Healing' functions as adjective followed by 'for me'. Suggestion: remove redundancy and use correct adjective structure: 'nature is very healing for me.'

× So when I had a chance to come back to rural area, I really enjoy it.

✓ So when I had a chance to come back to a rural area, I really enjoyed it.

Time clause 'when I had a chance' refers to past, so main verb should be past 'enjoyed' (Grammar problem type 5). Also include article 'a' before 'rural area' (Grammar problem type 22). Suggestion: keep consistent past tense in both clauses.

× For this question I think I would have to choose both because I find in Vietnam there are so many beautiful views that I haven't figured out yet and when I also travel abroad I also found a very beautiful scenery in other country which is very hard for me to choose.

✓ For this question I think I would have to choose both, because I find that Vietnam has so many beautiful views that I haven't discovered yet, and when I travel abroad I also find very beautiful scenery in other countries, so it is hard for me to choose.

Multiple issues: incorrect word order 'I find in Vietnam there are' should be 'I find that Vietnam has' (Grammar problem type 26 sentence structure/11 prepositions). 'Haven't figured out' is informal; 'discovered' fits better (Grammar problem type 6). Tense inconsistency: 'also travel' present is fine but 'also found' should be present 'find' to match general observation (Grammar problem type 6/5). 'Scenery' is uncountable so drop 'a' and use plural 'countries' (Grammar problem type 22 and 1). Suggestion: use 'find that Vietnam has', keep present tense for general observations, use 'discover' for finding new places, and correct article use for 'scenery' and pluralize 'countries'.