视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers directly, then add one specific reason and an example. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g., "makes me relax" → "relaxes me"). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if adding detail.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because nature relaxes me. For example, I often photograph rivers and forests at dusk because the light and reflections create peaceful, photogenic scenes.

建議: Clarify and correct grammar and minor word choice issues. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give specific supporting details and use linking words for coherence (e.g., "for example", "because"). Avoid unnecessary words like "on win" and check subject-verb agreement ("surroundings are").

範例: I prefer rural views because they help me feel peaceful after a busy week. For example, I enjoy photographing mountains and tree-covered valleys at sunrise and sunset, when the soft light and quiet surroundings feel restorative compared with city noise.

建議: Be more focused and avoid repetition. Start with a clear statement (own country or other countries), then give one or two specific reasons with a brief example. Remove duplicated words and use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example").

範例: I prefer views in other countries because new landscapes and cultures help me unwind. For example, when I travel I like to explore coastal towns or historic cityscapes, which offer fresh perspectives and memorable photo opportunities.

× Yes, I love nature, it's the best thing that make that makes me relax and nature is very.

✓ Yes, I love nature; it's the best thing that makes me relax, and nature is very relaxing.

Problem types: 27 Subject-verb agreement and 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs. 'that make' is incorrect because the subject 'thing' requires the singular verb 'makes' (subject-verb agreement). The clause 'nature is very' is incomplete; an adjective is needed. Use 'very relaxing' to describe nature. Suggestion: match verb number to the subject and complete adjective phrases (e.g., 'makes me relax' or 'helps me relax'; use 'relaxing' after 'very').

× I prefer views in rural areas because they help me on win and feel peaceful after a busy week with.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they help me unwind and feel peaceful after a busy week.

Problem type: 11 Incorrect use of prepositions and 6 Present tense/use of verbs. 'help me on win' is a mistaken split of 'unwind'; 'on' is wrong and 'win' should be 'wind' as part of 'unwind'. The phrase 'after a busy week with' ends with an unnecessary preposition 'with' and lacks an object. Suggestion: use the verb 'unwind' without a preposition and omit the trailing 'with'.

× For example, I love photographing mountains and leaves at sunrise and sunset when the light is soft and the surrounding are quiet.

✓ For example, I love photographing mountains and leaves at sunrise and sunset when the light is soft and the surroundings are quiet.

Problem types: 1 Singular and plural issue and 17 Incorrect use of the definite article. 'surrounding' should be plural 'surroundings' as a noun meaning the area around; subject-verb agreement requires 'surroundings are'. The rest of the sentence is correct. Suggestion: use the plural noun 'surroundings' when referring to the area around a place.

× It feels restorative compared with the noise.

✓ It feels restorative compared with the noise of the city.

Problem type: 26 Sentence structure errors / clarity. The original sentence is grammatical but vague; adding 'of the city' clarifies the comparison with urban noise. Suggestion: specify the source of 'the noise' when making comparisons for clearer meaning.

× I prefer views in other countries because the atmosphere is new and it helps me unwind after a busy day at work and I prefer traveling a lot to see different different places.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because the atmosphere is new and it helps me unwind after a busy day at work, and I like traveling a lot to see different places.

Problem types: 12 Incorrect use of pronouns and 26 Sentence structure errors. The sentence repeats 'prefer' unnecessarily and uses 'different different' (redundant). Also 'it helps me unwind' is acceptable, but the sentence runs long; replacing the second 'prefer' with 'like' improves flow. Suggestion: avoid repetition and redundancy, use varied verbs, and remove duplicate words.