视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and directly answer the question first. Avoid filler phrases (e.g. "that's an excellent question", "so on point", "umm") and correct small grammar mistakes (e.g. "passionate of" → "passionate about"). Also finish your sentences and keep to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences: state your main idea, give one or two specific supporting details, and finish with a brief concluding remark. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas clearly.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views. My phone gallery is full of landscape photos because I walk every day and like capturing scenery I find interesting. For example, I often stop to photograph rivers or tree-lined paths when the light is good.

建議: Good direct answer and clear reasons. Improve by adding a linking phrase and one concrete example to make the response more specific and natural. Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g. "sunsets and light" → "sunsets and natural light"). Keep it concise and avoid repeating similar words.

範例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy the presence of nature, like birds and wildlife, which you rarely see in cities. For instance, I love photographing sunsets over fields where the natural light creates warm colors that you don't get in an urban skyline.

建議: The idea is clear but the phrasing is slightly awkward and contains fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "I can't choose between them"), then give one concise contrasting detail about each (sunsets abroad, sunrises at home) with a linking word like "however" or "whereas." Replace vague words like "adorable" with more precise descriptors such as "dramatic" or "subtle."

範例: I can't choose between them because both offer different kinds of beauty. For example, sunsets I’ve seen abroad often have dramatic colors and cloud patterns, whereas sunrises at home tend to be quieter and more peaceful, with soft light over familiar landscapes.

× Well, that's an excellent question and it is so on point because I'm a I'm passionate of taking pictures.

✓ Well, that's an excellent question and it is so on point because I'm a - I'm passionate about taking pictures.

Use of preposition: English uses 'passionate about' not 'passionate of'. Replace with 'about'. Also remove duplicated 'I'm' or mark pause with a dash; here corrected to 'I'm a - I'm' to reflect speech pause but main fix is preposition.

× My phone gallery is full of scenery and pictures of landscapes because I walk every day and I adore walking in the.

✓ My phone gallery is full of scenery and pictures of landscapes because I walk every day and I adore walking there.

Sentence ended with incomplete prepositional phrase 'in the.' This is a sentence structure issue: the intended location word was missing. Replacing with 'there' completes the thought. Alternatively specify 'in the countryside' if intended.

× I definitely choose rural areas because what makes them special for me is the nature, the birds, the animals.

✓ I definitely prefer rural areas because what makes them special for me is the nature, the birds, and the animals.

The student's verb 'choose' is acceptable but 'prefer' is more natural in this context; this is a style/tenseness choice. Also add 'and' before the last item for correct coordination. No plural/article error with 'nature' but natural phrasing is 'prefer'. This falls under present tense/word choice; corrected to make sentence natural and grammatically complete.

× Sunset and lights are more special in those places than in urban areas.

✓ Sunsets and lights are more special in those places than in urban areas.

Number agreement and article use: 'Sunset' as a general plural idea should be 'sunsets' to match 'lights'. Using plural makes the comparison clearer. Also could use 'the sunsets and lights' if referring to specific ones; here plural generalization fits better.

× I wouldn't like to choose between them as every nature is beautiful on its own.

✓ I wouldn't like to choose between them, as nature in every place is beautiful in its own way.

Phrase 'every nature' is unidiomatic. Use 'nature in every place' or 'nature everywhere' and 'in its own way' is more natural than 'on its own.' Adjusted comma for clarity. This is primarily incorrect word/phrase choice tied to modality expression.

× In other countries the sunset is umm is adorable in its own way, and in my country the sunrises are beautiful in other ways too.

✓ In other countries the sunset is, um, adorable in its own way, and in my country the sunrises are beautiful in other ways too.

Removed duplicated 'is' and standardized filler 'umm' to 'um'. Added comma for natural speech pause. 'Sunset' vs 'sunrises' is acceptable but could be made parallel: 'sunsets are adorable ... and sunrises are beautiful ...' This correction fixes repetition and improves fluency.