视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitation and repetition, give a clear topic sentence, and add one specific detail about why you enjoy photographing those subjects. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep the answer within 3–4 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture moods and moments. For example, I often photograph the sky and birds, especially during sunrise, because the warm light creates beautiful colors. Also, I enjoy shooting rainy scenes since raindrops and reflections make ordinary places look dramatic.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating ideas. Briefly explain one or two specific reasons and give a short example or comparison to make the answer more natural and informative.

範例: I prefer rural areas because I love natural scenery and calm surroundings. For instance, I enjoy walking by rivers and photographing open fields where the light and wind create peaceful scenes, unlike noisy city streets.

建議: Avoid absolute negative statements about your country and be more precise. Give a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific comparisons and a short example of what you like about views in other countries. Keep it concise and finish the final sentence properly.

範例: I usually prefer views in other countries because I am studying in China and enjoy its varied landscapes and cityscapes. For example, Chinese mountain parks and historic streets offer interesting textures and architectural details that I don't see in my city in Ethiopia, where most views are limited to modern blocks.

× 'I like taking pictures a lot Like I'm a photo person.'

✓ 'I like taking pictures a lot. I am a photography person.'

'Like' is used as a filler and creates a run-on; this is a speech disfluency rather than grammatical structure. The verb form 'I'm a photo person' is informal and awkward. Replace the filler with a full stop and use a clearer noun phrase. Suggestion: pause instead of saying "like" and use 'photography' or 'photographer' depending on intended meaning.'

× 'I take every photo of everything like uh, for example, I, I love taking the sky, birds and when it's raining, Oh my God, I love taking pictures and it's, it's, it gives me.'

✓ 'I take photos of many things. For example, I love photographing the sky, birds, and scenes when it is raining. I really enjoy taking pictures; it makes me happy.'

'Every photo of everything' is vague and ungrammatical; use 'photos of many things.' 'Taking the sky' is incorrect collocation; use 'photographing the sky.' Remove filler interjections and repeat words. Use consistent verb forms and complete clauses. Also replace 'it's, it's, it gives me' with 'it makes me happy' to complete the thought.'

× 'I prefer rural areas because I personally love nature, the wind and the chill environment of rural areas.'

✓ 'I prefer rural areas because I personally love nature, the wind, and the peaceful atmosphere of rural places.'

'Chill environment' is informal and ambiguous in this context; 'peaceful atmosphere' is more appropriate. Repetition of 'rural areas' is redundant; replace second occurrence with 'rural places' or omit it. Use commas correctly in a list.'

× 'So I personally prefer rural areas.'

✓ 'So I personally prefer rural areas.'

'So I personally prefer rural areas' is grammatically correct but repetitive after previous sentence. No tense change needed; consider removing redundancy for clarity.'

× 'I think I prefer other countries view because in my country Ethiopia, there is nothing to see or there is no view at all.'

✓ 'I think I prefer views in other countries because in my country, Ethiopia, there is not much to see in the city.'

'Other countries view' is ungrammatical; use 'views in other countries.' The clause 'there is nothing to see or there is no view at all' is exaggerated and wordy; 'there is not much to see in the city' is clearer and grammatically correct. Also place commas correctly around 'Ethiopia.'

× 'Of course there is in rural areas but not in the city.'

✓ 'Of course there are views in rural areas, but not in the city.'

'There is in rural areas' is incorrect because 'views' (plural) requires 'there are.' Use 'views in rural areas' for clarity and match plurality. Also add a comma before 'but.'

× 'Since I live in the city there is no specific view to see.'

✓ 'Since I live in the city, there is no specific view to see.'

Missing comma after introductory adverbial clause 'Since I live in the city.' Comma improves readability. Otherwise sentence is acceptable though 'specific view' could be 'a specific view' depending on nuance.'

× 'So I think I choose other countries which is China.'

✓ 'So I think I would choose another country, such as China.'

'I choose other countries which is China' is ungrammatical: 'other countries' (plural) conflicts with 'which is China' (singular). Use 'another country' or 'a country such as China.' Also use conditional 'would choose' to sound natural when expressing preference.'

× 'I am studying in China so I love the.'

✓ 'I am studying in China, so I love it here.'

Sentence is incomplete: 'I love the' lacks an object. Complete thought by specifying what is loved, e.g., 'it here' meaning China. Add comma before 'so' when connecting two independent clauses.