视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations (umm, uh), and give one or two brief specific examples of what you photograph and why. Use linking words if you add details.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs because photography is one of my main hobbies. I particularly like capturing candid shots of people and wide-angle views of city streets, as they often show interesting emotions and lively scenes.

建議: Give a direct answer first, then add clear supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and grammatical errors. Be specific about what you like in rural areas (e.g. mountains, rivers) and why (peace, natural light). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because the countryside offers scenic landscapes such as mountains, rivers and open fields. Moreover, the peaceful atmosphere and natural light make it easier to take striking photographs.

建議: Start with a clear preference (own country or abroad) and give coherent reasons with specific examples. Avoid unintelligible phrases and fragmented sentences. Mention a country or place you liked and explain why, linking sentences logically.

範例: I prefer visiting views in other countries because I enjoy discovering different cultures and landscapes. For instance, I visited Canada recently and loved its lakes and mountains, so I would like to explore more international destinations in the future.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures because photography is one of my favorite passions.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures because photography is one of my favorite hobbies.

'Favorite passions' is redundant and unnatural in English; 'passion' already implies strong liking, and 'favorite hobby' is more appropriate. Use 'like' instead of 'do like' for naturalness unless emphasizing; remove unnecessary emphasis.

× Umm, I like to capture pictures of people and, uh, locations.

✓ Umm, I like capturing pictures of people and locations.

Both 'like to capture' and 'like capturing' are grammatical, but using the gerund 'capturing' here is more natural and matches previous 'taking pictures.' Also 'capture pictures of locations' is slightly awkward; 'capturing pictures of people and locations' is smoother.

× News in rural areas to urban areas because in rural areas frequency lots of scenic environments, the mountain, river, hilltops, beautiful fields.

✓ I prefer rural areas to urban areas because rural areas often have many scenic places, such as mountains, rivers, hilltops, and beautiful fields.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and wordy. 'Prefer X to Y' is the correct structure. 'Frequency lots of' is incorrect; use 'often have many' or 'frequently have many.' Also list items need plural forms and commas.

× So in short, and also it provides a peaceful environment for us and it's a kind it also gives us an opportunity.

✓ In short, they provide a peaceful environment and give us an opportunity to relax and enjoy nature.

Sentence is fragmented and repetitive. Combine ideas into one clear sentence: subject 'they' (rural areas) with verbs 'provide' and 'give.' Remove redundant 'and also' and unclear phrase 'it's a kind.' Specify the opportunity (to relax and enjoy nature) for clarity.

× Play people who sing producing Anwar Kumar's chief Myanmando because I have seen a lot of locations in Mayankandi, so I would like to visit more places in the future.

✓ I prefer places in my own country because I have seen many locations in Myanmar and would like to visit more places in the future.

The original sentence seems garbled and contains unrelated words. Replace with a clear response to the question about preferring views in own country or other countries. Use 'prefer places in my own country' and correct country name 'Myanmar.' 'Have seen a lot of locations' -> 'have seen many locations.' Keep tense consistent.

× Have been to Canada recently, such a beautiful place, so I would like to explore more.

✓ I have been to Canada recently; it is a beautiful place, so I would like to explore more of it.

The original lacks a subject ('I') and proper sentence structure. Use present perfect 'I have been to Canada recently' to indicate recent experience. Connect clauses with a semicolon or conjunction and clarify 'explore more of it.'