视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the reply more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar errors, and add one specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because I’m interested in painting. For example, I often take photos of city sunsets and then sketch them at home, which helps me capture the mood and experiment with colour. This process lets me express my feelings more clearly.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, fix grammar and cohesion, and provide a clearer, specific example. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and avoid repeating similar adjectives.

範例: I prefer rural views because I grew up in a busy city and enjoy the tranquillity of the countryside. For example, when I walk beside a rice field the breeze on my face and the sound of birds help me relax, so I find rural scenes more calming and inspiring for my art.

建議: Respond directly, correct grammar and repetition, and supply one clear, specific example with a linking phrase. Avoid vague phrases like "a few of different" and repeat words.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because foreign landscapes often offer new architectural styles and natural scenery. For instance, the churches in Milan with their ornate facades and the dramatic Turkish coastline provide contrasts to Chinese scenery, which makes travelling more inspiring for my sketches.

× I like taking picture of different views because I'm really interested in painting.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because I'm really interested in painting.

Use plural 'pictures' because 'taking' refers to photographing multiple views; 'picture' must match plural noun when speaking generally about more than one image. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when referring to more than one item (take pictures, read books).

× I think different views have different sense of feelings.

✓ I think different views evoke different feelings.

Original phrase 'sense of feelings' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use the verb 'evoke' plus the noun 'feelings' to express that views produce emotions. Also avoid redundant words like 'sense of feelings.' Suggestion: Use verbs like 'evoke' or 'give' with 'feelings' or 'sensations'.

× Then I can use my pen to draw it and express my own feeling.

✓ Then I can use my pen to draw them and express my own feelings.

Pronoun 'it' mismatches plural 'different views'; use plural 'them.' Also 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' when referring to various emotions. Ensure pronoun number agrees with the noun and pluralize abstract nouns as needed. Suggestion: Match pronouns to the noun number and use plural for general emotional states when appropriate.

× I was born and raised in urban.

✓ I was born and raised in an urban area.

'In urban' is incomplete; use 'in an urban area' or 'in the city.' Include an article and the noun 'area' to make the prepositional phrase grammatical. Suggestion: Use 'in the city', 'in an urban area' or 'in a town' depending on meaning.

× I think the rural area is more quiet, is more peaceful and make people relaxing.

✓ I think the rural area is quieter, more peaceful and makes people feel relaxed.

Comparative of 'quiet' is 'quieter.' 'Make people relaxing' is incorrect: use 'make people feel relaxed' or 'is relaxing.' Also subject-verb agreement: 'area' (singular) requires 'makes.' Suggestion: Use correct comparative forms and appropriate verb phrases for emotions (feel relaxed, be relaxing).

× For example, the wind blows to your face or the bark around you is really interesting for me.

✓ For example, the wind blowing on your face or the birdsong around you is really interesting to me.

Use 'blowing on your face' or 'blows on your face' rather than 'blows to your face.' 'Bark' is wrong contextually (bark is tree covering or animal sound); likely 'birdsong' or 'sound of trees.' Also use 'interesting to me' not 'for me.' Suggestion: Choose correct prepositions ('on' not 'to') and correct nouns for intended meaning (birdsong, rustling leaves).

× I prefer views in another country because the landscape brought abroad feel very different from those in China.

✓ I prefer views in another country because the landscapes abroad feel very different from those in China.

'Brought abroad' is wrong; use 'abroad' as adverb. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match 'those.' Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'landscapes...feel.' Suggestion: Use 'abroad' correctly and make nouns plural when comparing with 'those.'

× For example, the church in Milano or the landscape or the coastal in Turkey could could give me a few of different which which makes traveling much more interesting for me.

✓ For example, the churches in Milan, the landscapes, or the coast in Turkey can give me new experiences, which make traveling much more interesting for me.

Multiple issues: 'Milano' in English is 'Milan.' Remove duplicated 'could could' and duplicated 'which.' 'A few of different' is ungrammatical; use 'new experiences' or 'different impressions.' Also ensure subject-verb agreement: plural 'experiences' => 'make.' Suggestion: Avoid word repetition, choose correct English place names, and use clear nouns like 'experiences' or 'impressions' when referring to impressions from places.