视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, reduce hesitation and repetition, and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and a short reason. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and correct noun/verb forms (e.g., “taking pictures,” “whenever I see a beautiful scene”).

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I always carry a good camera, so whenever I see a beautiful scene — for example, a sunrise or a mountain landscape — I capture it because photography is my hobby and helps me remember special moments.

建議: Provide a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Reduce repetition and fix verb agreement (e.g., “they give me” or “they give me a mesmerizing view”). Mention concrete examples instead of repeating words.

範例: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and visually striking. For instance, I enjoy watching the sunrise over fields and the colorful sunsets in the countryside, which give me calm and good photo opportunities.

建議: Make a clear comparison and give a reason. Answer directly (e.g., I like both, but for different reasons) and support with one specific example. Avoid vague phrases and hesitations. Use correct possessive forms (e.g., “views of another country”).

範例: I like views in both my country and other countries because each offers something different. For example, my country has familiar cultural landscapes that feel meaningful to me, while visiting another country lets me discover new architecture and natural scenery that inspire my photography.

× I really like taking picture of with uh, different views because I have a uh good camera with me whenever see uh, whenever I see any kind of beautiful way I used to capture in my camera, it, it, I can say it was uh, it it's like my hobby.

✓ I really like taking pictures of different views because I have a good camera with me; whenever I see a beautiful scene I capture it with my camera. It is my hobby.

Errors: 'taking picture' needs plural 'pictures' when speaking generally (count noun) - fits Verb + -ing context because 'taking' is used but noun form wrong; also awkward phrasing 'of with' removed. 'whenever see' lacks subject; added 'I'. 'used to capture' implies past habitual; replaced with present simple 'capture' to match current habit. Suggestions: use 'taking pictures', include subject before verbs, use consistent tense for habitual actions, and simplify redundant words. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Uh, actually I'm really fond of rural areas views because it, uh, it give me a, such a mesmerizing view, uh, like, uh, in the morning sun, sun, sun rising and in the evening sunset.

✓ Actually, I'm really fond of rural views because they give me such a mesmerizing sight, like the sunrise in the morning and the sunset in the evening.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and tense: 'it give' is wrong for present tense; 'they give' matches plural 'rural views'. 'rural areas views' is ungrammatical; 'rural views' or 'views of rural areas' is correct. 'sun, sun, sun rising' is repetitive and should be 'sunrise'. Suggestions: use correct plural forms and present simple for habitual preferences, choose concise nouns ('sunrise'/'sunset'), and ensure subject and verb agree. Grammar problem type ID:6

× And whenever I got a chance to go to the rural area and to enjoy such a beautiful view.

✓ Whenever I get a chance to go to the rural area, I enjoy such beautiful views.

Errors: 'got' is past tense which conflicts with general/habitual meaning; use present simple 'get'. The original sentence is a fragment lacking a main clause; revised to a complete sentence with clear subject and verb. Suggestions: use present simple for habitual actions and complete sentences with subject and main verb. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Ah, I really like view of my country as well as another country's it, it, I can say it's not about the uh, view, uh, my country and another country it, it's uh, umm, it's a reason of uh.

✓ I really like the views of my country as well as those of other countries. It's not just about the views of my country or another country; there are other reasons.

Errors: Possessive and noun forms are incorrect: 'another country's' needs a noun after the possessive (e.g., 'another country's views') or use 'other countries' with plural noun. 'view' should be plural 'views' when speaking generally. The original is also fragmented and repetitive. Suggestions: use plural forms for general statements ('views'), use 'other countries' rather than a possessive without a noun, and restructure to avoid fragments and repetition. Grammar problem type ID:12