视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, avoid filler words (like, umm), correct grammar (use past tense properly), and give one or two specific supporting details. Keep the answer within 3–4 sentences and use linking words (however, but, because) to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I used to enjoy taking pictures of different views, but lately I find it less interesting. However, I still think photography is a great hobby because it helps me relax and focus away from daily stress. For example, when I take photos of a park or a city skyline I feel calmer and more present.

建議: Answer directly with a clear preference, remove hesitations, and provide a specific reason with a linking word. Replace vague phrases (‘coziness’) with concrete descriptions (quiet, fresh air, scenery). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer rural areas because they are quieter and offer more natural scenery. For example, I enjoy photographing fields, forests, and small villages where I can capture peaceful landscapes and local life.

建議: Make a clear statement and give a specific reason. Avoid repetition and pauses; use linking words such as because or since to explain. Provide a concrete example of what differences you notice (architecture, food, colours) and finish the thought in one or two sentences.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different architecture and cultural scenes that I haven’t seen before. For instance, when I visited a European city I was fascinated by the historic buildings and street markets, which gave me fresh perspectives for photography.

× 'I used to like taking pictures in like general, but when I got older I got used.'

✓ 'I used to like taking pictures in general, but when I got older I grew out of it.'

'Third person singular issue' applies because the verb phrase 'got used' is incorrect for the intended meaning; 'grew out of' is the correct past form to express losing interest. Also remove unnecessary filler 'like' and correct 'in like general' to 'in general' to be idiomatic.

× 'I used to like taking pictures in like general, but when I got older I got used. I got like bored of it. But I think it's a really good hobby to distract you from the outside world and.'

✓ 'I used to like taking pictures in general, but when I got older I grew out of it. I got bored of it. However, I think it is a really good hobby to distract you from the outside world.'

'Sentence structure errors' apply because the original contains sentence fragments, informal fillers ('like', 'umm'), and an unfinished conjunction 'and' at the end. Corrections remove fillers, combine ideas into complete sentences, replace 'But' with 'However' for formality, and remove the trailing 'and'. Use full forms 'it is' for clarity.

× 'Umm because I'm not a photographer. I think the rural areas are umm, more likely to be in my like interests because umm, you can feel the umm like coziness in there and like, I prefer rural areas.'

✓ 'Because I am not a photographer, I think rural areas are more in line with my interests because you can feel the coziness there, and I prefer rural areas.'

'Sentence structure errors' apply because the original has fragments, excessive fillers ('umm', 'like') and awkward phrasing 'more likely to be in my like interests' and 'coziness in there'. Corrections remove fillers, convert the fragment into a full sentence by attaching the reason clause, use 'more in line with my interests' for idiomatic expression, and place 'there' after 'coziness'.

× 'Definitely other countries because I already know the places in my country and umm the I know the general culture in here, but in the other countries I always see a a difference, umm view point of view and it's really helps the.'

✓ 'Definitely other countries, because I already know the places in my country and I know the general culture here; in other countries I always see different viewpoints, and it really helps me.'

'Sentence structure errors' apply since the original has repetition ('the I'), duplicated words ('a a'), unfinished ending, fillers, and awkward phrases ('view point of view'). Corrections remove fillers, fix repetition, replace 'view point of view' with 'viewpoints', add 'me' after 'helps' to complete the verb's object, and use punctuation to separate clauses.