视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce repetition, correct grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus brief supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Include one or two specific examples to make the answer more vivid.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph my meals because the presentation is attractive, and I also take photos when I hang out with family or friends to capture memories. These photos help me remember special moments and share them on social media.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'hills' not 'bills', 'calm' and 'relaxing'), and add one specific reason or short example with a linking word. Keep it concise and avoid repetition.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are calmer and more relaxing. For instance, I like looking at rolling hills and open fields where there are fewer people, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

建議: Make a clear contrast using linking words (e.g., 'although', 'but'), fix grammar and phrasing (e.g., 'I used to prefer views in other countries' and 'I miss my home country, Korea'), and give a specific reason or brief example of what you miss. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Although I used to prefer views in other countries because they felt refreshing, now I often miss the scenery of my home country, Korea. For example, I miss the local parks and familiar streets, so I sometimes want to travel back to visit family and see those places again.

× I like to take picture of different view.

✓ I like to take pictures of different views.

Countable nouns 'picture' and 'view' need plural forms here because the speaker refers to taking more than one. Use 'pictures' and 'views' to match plural meaning.

× Especially I like to take picture for food or while when I hang out with my family or friends I like to I prefer to take a picture.

✓ Especially I like to take pictures of food, or when I hang out with my family or friends I prefer to take pictures.

Multiple issues: 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' (countable plural). Use preposition 'of' with 'pictures of food'. Remove redundant words 'while when' and duplicate 'I like to I prefer'. Use 'prefer to take pictures' for clear, concise present habit. Present participle not required; main verbs remain base form after 'like'/'prefer'.

× I'll say I I prefer bills in rural area because it's more calm and it make me relaxed and the view is more clear and it's not crowded by people so I like the rural areas.

✓ I'd say I prefer hills in rural areas because they're calmer and they make me feel relaxed, the views are clearer, and they aren't crowded, so I like rural areas.

Multiple grammar issues: 'bills' likely meant 'hills' (vocabulary correction). 'Rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' when speaking generally. Use plural verbs 'they're' and 'they make' to agree with plural subject. Use comparative forms 'calmer' and 'clearer'. Use 'make me feel relaxed' for natural expression. 'Not crowded by people' simplified to 'aren't crowded'.

× I used to prefer in other countries because it makes me feel refreshed but since when I live in Australia, I missed my own country in the Korea so I wanna go back sometimes.

✓ I used to prefer other countries because they made me feel refreshed, but since I moved to Australia I have missed my own country, Korea, so I sometimes want to go back.

Preposition and tense errors: 'prefer in other countries' should be 'prefer other countries' (no 'in'). Use past tense 'made' for 'used to' preference. 'Since when I live' is incorrect; use 'since I moved to Australia' or 'after I moved'. 'Missed' requires present perfect 'have missed' when referring to a period up to now. 'in the Korea' is wrong; use just 'Korea'. Replace informal 'wanna' with 'want to' and place 'sometimes' correctly.