视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more concise and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail with a linking phrase. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “different places” and “a new place” together) and unnecessary filler. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use a precise phrase like “preserve memories” instead of “take memories.”

範例: Yes — I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I travel to a new city I always photograph the skyline and local streets to preserve memories and remind myself of the atmosphere there.

建議: Open with a direct preference (urban or rural), then give 1–2 specific reasons connected with linking words. Correct grammar (use past participles/clauses correctly) and avoid repetition. Use clearer vocabulary: e.g., “bustling” for noisy and “peaceful” for rural. Keep sentences short and coherent.

範例: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and scenic. For instance, unlike the bustling streets and numerous malls of my hometown, the countryside offers quiet fields and clear views that I find relaxing.

建議: Be direct about your preference and provide a clear, specific reason or example. Remove hesitations (“uh”, “umm”) and incomplete phrases. If comparing your country with others, state a concrete difference (e.g., architecture, culture, landscapes) and finish the thought. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing architectures and landscapes that are very different from those at home. For example, I would love to photograph European historic streets and Asian mountain scenery to compare them with the beaches and cityscapes I know from the Philippines.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, especially when I go to different places or a new place, and I love to take memories so that I can also look back to it in the future.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, especially when I go to new places, and I love to take photos so that I can look back on them in the future.

The phrase 'take memories' is incorrect; we 'take photos' or 'create memories.' Also 'look back to it' is not natural; use 'look back on them' to refer to photos. Additionally, 'a new place' is better expressed as 'new places' to match 'different places.' Use '-ing' 'taking' correctly here, but the noun choice and preposition needed correction (see preposition note).

× I grew up in an urban area which is quite noisy, have a lot of activities and malls in different sites and for me I would love to go to rural, rural areas which is quite different.

✓ I grew up in an urban area, which was quite noisy and had a lot of activities and malls in different areas, so I would love to go to rural areas, which are quite different.

The original sentence has subject-verb agreement and tense consistency issues: after 'I grew up' the clause describing the area should use past tense 'was' and 'had' to match. 'Have' and 'are' were mismatched with singular/plural subjects. 'Different sites' is better as 'different areas.' Also remove the repeated 'rural.' Break into clearer clauses for grammar and clarity.

× I prefer uh, views in other countries. I know that Philippines is also one of the most, uh, visited places in the world, but for me, I also would like to try, uh, different countries, especially, uh, here in the Philippines where don't experience umm.

✓ I prefer views in other countries. I know that the Philippines is also one of the most visited places in the world, but I would like to try visiting different countries, especially places in the Philippines that I haven't experienced yet.

Pronoun and article issues: 'Philippines' requires the definite article 'the.' The phrase 'here in the Philippines where don't experience' is ungrammatical; it lacks a subject and correct verb form. Rephrase as 'places in the Philippines that I haven't experienced yet' to provide a clear subject and correct use of the present perfect ('haven't experienced') to indicate life experience. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity.