视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify and correct factual/word-choice errors, avoid redundancy, and tighten sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct place names and accurate vocabulary. Use linking words (“for example”, “also”) to make it coherent. Watch for minor grammar errors (e.g., past participles, articles) and incorrect proper nouns.

範例: Yes — I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often shoot cityscapes like the Shanghai skyline and coastal scenes such as the beaches in Sanya. I also like mountain and lake landscapes because they each offer different moods and compositions.

建議: Be concise and correct awkward phrases (“a real estate from city life” is incorrect). Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two concrete reasons with linking words (e.g., “because”, “for example”). Include specific imagery or a brief example to support your preference.

範例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more peaceful than cities. For example, in my hometown the green fields, rivers and old houses create a calm atmosphere that helps me relax and think clearly.

建議: Avoid vagueness and incorrect place names (e.g., “Zhiyoshi” unclear). Start with a direct stance, give a reason, and add a brief example plus future plan using linking words like “however” or “also”. Use precise names and check spelling of locations.

範例: At the moment I prefer views in my own country because China still has many places I want to explore. For example, I recently visited Sanya and was impressed by its beaches; however, I also want to visit the Alps in Europe next to experience a very different mountain landscape.

× I've taken pictures of the city skyline in Shanghai, the late Angel Jaipur and the beach in Sanya, and each one tells a difference story.

✓ I've taken pictures of the city skyline in Shanghai, the late Angel Jaipur and the beach in Sanya, and each one tells a different story.

The word 'difference' is a noun; the intended modifier for 'story' is the adjective 'different'. Replace 'difference' with 'different' to correctly modify the noun 'story'. Suggestion: Use 'different' when describing a noun (different story).

× Rural areas are quiet and full of natural beauty which feels like a real estate from city life.

✓ Rural areas are quiet and full of natural beauty which feels like a real retreat from city life.

'Real estate' refers to property or land and is not appropriate here. The intended meaning is a place of escape or retreat. Use a correct noun such as 'retreat' and the preposition 'from' is correct. Alternatively rephrase to 'a real escape from city life'. Suggestion: Choose a noun that matches the intended meaning (retreat/escape) and keep 'from city life'.

× I love the countryside in my hometown, green fields, snow, rivers and old houses.

✓ I love the countryside in my hometown: green fields, snow, rivers and old houses.

The original sentence is a run-on list attached to an independent clause without proper punctuation. In English, use a colon or conjunction to introduce a list. Adding a colon clarifies that the following items describe 'the countryside'. Suggestion: Use a colon or add 'such as' before the list (e.g., 'I love the countryside in my hometown, such as green fields, ...').

× For now, I prefer views in my own country because China has so many beautiful places I haven't seen yet.

✓ For now, I prefer views in my own country because China has so many beautiful places I haven't seen yet.

This sentence is correct and contains the past participle 'seen' properly as part of the present perfect 'have not seen'. No change needed. Suggestion: Keep as is.

× I visited Zhiyoshi and Sanya and they were stunning.

✓ I visited Zhiyoshi and Sanya, and they were stunning.

The original is mostly correct but needs a comma before the conjunction to join two independent clauses for better readability. This is punctuation rather than a grammar type from the list, but it improves sentence structure. Suggestion: Add a comma before 'and' when joining independent clauses.

× Each type has its own beauty and I want to capture them in my own way.

✓ Each type has its own beauty and I want to capture it in my own way.

The subject 'Each type' is singular, so the pronoun referring back to it must also be singular ('it'), not plural ('them'). This is a subject-pronoun agreement error tied to sentence structure. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents (each -> it).

× It always makes me feel peaceful.

✓ It always makes me feel peaceful.

The sentence is grammatically correct; 'peaceful' correctly functions as an adjective describing the speaker's feeling. No change needed. Suggestion: Keep as is.