视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cách cải thiện: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp hơn bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (chẳng hạn: 'the natural world' thay vì 'natural world'), và rút gọn câu để tự nhiên hơn. Sử dụng liên từ hợp lý và cung cấp một ví dụ cụ thể về loại cảnh bạn thích. Ngoài ra cần chú ý số lượng câu không vượt quá 5 và tránh dùng từ không chính xác như 'desire to' trong ngữ cảnh này.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because I love capturing nature and architecture. For example, I often take photos of sunsets over the sea and busy city streets at night, which show contrasting moods and lighting.

建議: Cách cải thiện: Trả lời cần bắt đầu với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (ví dụ 'I'm torn between them'). Chú ý ngữ pháp (số ít/ số nhiều: 'I am torn', 'each place has', 'it offers'), dùng từ nối hợp lý ('however', 'on the other hand') và đưa một lý do cụ thể cho mỗi lựa chọn. Tránh cấu trúc rườm rà và sửa lỗi collocation như 'many convenience' -> 'many conveniences' hoặc 'a lot of conveniences'.

範例: I'm torn between them because they offer different kinds of beauty. Rural areas give me a peaceful atmosphere and open landscapes, while urban areas are exciting with modern architecture and convenient facilities.

建議: Cách cải thiện: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và collocation ('each country has its charming beauty', 'I tend to immerse myself in the serenity...'). Trả lời nên ngắn gọn, trực tiếp nêu sở thích trước rồi giải thích với một ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh dùng từ không phù hợp như 'engrossed in' khi muốn nói 'fascinated by' hay 'attracted to'.

範例: I appreciate both, but I usually prefer views in my own country for their simplicity and familiar landscapes. However, I'm also fascinated by other countries' modern skylines and unique cultural landmarks, such as Tokyo's cityscape.

× There are various captivating sceneries that I desire to explore.

✓ There are various captivating scenes that I desire to explore.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun; the plural 'sceneries' is incorrect. Use 'scenes' or keep 'scenery' without plural. Also 'desire to explore' is acceptable but more natural is 'would like to explore' or 'want to explore'. Suggestion: Use 'scenes' or 'scenery' depending on meaning.

× Not only does it show me how gorgeous natural world is, but also it helps me know better about my world that I am living in.

✓ Not only does it show me how gorgeous the natural world is, but it also helps me understand better the world I am living in.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'natural world' is incorrect. Word order for 'but also' with inversion should be 'but it also'. 'Know better about my world' is awkward; use 'understand better the world I am living in' or 'understand my world better.' Suggestion: Add 'the' and change phrase to 'helps me understand my world better.'

× And torn between them, each place have a unique beauty.

✓ I am torn between them; each place has a unique beauty.

Sentence begins with 'And torn between them' which lacks a subject and is ungrammatical. Use full subject 'I am torn between them.' Also 'each place' requires singular verb 'has' (subject-verb agreement). Suggestion: Start with 'I am torn between them.' and use 'has.'

× For rural areas it brings me a peaceful feeling among its serenity.

✓ Rural areas bring me a peaceful feeling with their serenity.

Use plural verb 'bring' to agree with plural subject 'rural areas.' 'It brings' is incorrect. Also 'among its serenity' is awkward; use 'with their serenity.' Suggestion: Make subject and verb agree and adjust preposition to 'with.'

× Furthermore, urban areas brings me a bustling and busy world but also it offer many convenience.

✓ Furthermore, urban areas bring me a bustling and busy atmosphere, and they also offer many conveniences.

'Urban areas' is plural, so verbs should be 'bring' and 'offer' (not 'brings' or 'offer' mismatched). 'It offer' is incorrect pronoun-verb agreement. 'Convenience' should be plural 'conveniences' or 'convenience' as an uncountable noun with appropriate article. 'World' is odd here; 'atmosphere' is better. Suggestion: Use plural verbs and plural noun 'conveniences.'

× In my opinion, each country have it charming beauty.

✓ In my opinion, each country has its charming beauty.

'Each country' is singular and requires 'has' not 'have.' 'It charming beauty' is incorrect pronoun/adjective order; use possessive adjective 'its' before 'charming beauty.' Suggestion: Use 'has' and 'its.'

× I tend to immerse in my serenity and simplicity of my own country while I am engrossed in the futuristic and elegant beauty of other countries.

✓ I tend to immerse myself in the serenity and simplicity of my own country, while I am engrossed in the futuristic and elegant beauty of other countries.

After 'immerse' the reflexive pronoun 'myself' is required: 'immerse myself in.' Also 'my serenity' is odd; use 'the serenity' or 'the serenity and simplicity of my own country.' Suggestion: Add 'myself' and use 'the serenity and simplicity.'