视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitations and filler words, and make sentences concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use accurate collocations (e.g., "beautiful scenery" not "beautiful sceneries").

範例: Yes, I do. I love capturing beautiful scenery when I travel because it helps me remember the place. Also, I often post a few of my best photos on social media to share interesting locations with my friends.

建議: Remove pauses and hesitations, and use clearer comparisons with linking words. Use correct prepositions and singular/plural forms ("downtown" or "the suburbs"). Keep sentences within 3–4 short sentences and give specific reasons or examples.

範例: It depends on my mood. Generally, I prefer urban views because I enjoy the vibrant atmosphere and cultural activities in the city. However, after a stressful week I choose the suburbs for their peace and natural scenery, which helps me relax.

建議: Avoid excessive hesitations and finish your thought. Give a clear contrast using linking words like "but" or "however," and provide a specific example or reason. Correct grammar (e.g., "beautiful places", "fed up with these views").

範例: I often prefer views in my own country because I feel a strong connection to the culture and know many beautiful places there. However, sometimes I choose to travel abroad to discover new landscapes and experience different cultures.

× Definitely I, you know, like capturing, uh, beautiful sceneries of different places, especially when I travel.

✓ Definitely, I, you know, like capturing beautiful scenery of different places, especially when I travel.

This sentence has redundancy and word order issues; 'Definitely, I, you know, like capturing' should be streamlined. Use 'scenery' (uncountable) rather than 'sceneries'. Remove filler commas and misplaced phrases for clearer word order: 'I like capturing beautiful scenery.' Also keep discourse markers ('you know') set off by commas.

× I also enjoy it the interesting to post, uh, some of these pictures on my social media and, uh, to share with interesting places with my friends.

✓ I also enjoy posting some of these pictures on my social media and sharing interesting places with my friends.

The original has wrong article and verb forms: 'enjoy it the interesting to post' is incorrect. After 'enjoy' use the gerund form: 'enjoy posting.' Remove the extraneous 'it' and extra 'the'. Use 'sharing interesting places' rather than 'to share with interesting places' to correct verb form and preposition use.

× Uh, personally, it depends on my mood and how I'm feeling.

✓ Personally, it depends on my mood and how I feel.

Mixing present simple 'depends' with present continuous 'I'm feeling' is acceptable conversationally but for clarity and parallel structure use simple present 'I feel' to match 'depends on my mood.' Maintain consistent tense for habits and general states.

× Uh, I, umm, uh, prefer to stay in the downtown and to feel this, uh, uh, vibrant and energetic atmosphere in the city center.

✓ I prefer staying downtown and feeling the vibrant, energetic atmosphere in the city center.

After 'prefer' you can use either 'to' + verb or verb+ing, but keep consistent. Here, 'stay in the downtown' is awkward; use 'stay downtown' or 'staying downtown.' Also include 'the' before 'vibrant' or restructure: 'feeling the vibrant, energetic atmosphere.' Use parallel gerunds for clarity.

× And also when I'm tired or exhausted, especially after hard work, I prefer to go suburb and to feel comfortable and, uh, tranquility.

✓ And also when I'm tired or exhausted, especially after hard work, I prefer to go to the suburbs and feel comfortable and relaxed.

Use the preposition 'to' with 'the suburbs' (plural) not 'go suburb.' 'Tranquility' is a noun; parallel structure requires an adjective like 'relaxed' or use 'feel tranquility' but 'feel relaxed' is more natural. Also avoid redundant 'to' before the second verb when keeping parallel structure.

× Uh, sometimes, uh, I umm, prefer, uh, my own country, uh, because I'm connected to it and uh, I know, uh, a really beautiful places in my own native country.

✓ Sometimes I prefer my own country because I'm connected to it and I know really beautiful places there.

Problems: 'prefer my own country' needs no extra commas; 'a really beautiful places' mixes an article 'a' with plural 'places' (singular/plural error). Remove 'a' or change to 'a really beautiful place.' Also use 'there' to avoid repetition of 'my own native country.'

× Uh, but uh, I'm a bit fed up of this views and I want to feel.

✓ But I'm a bit fed up with these views and I want to experience something different.

Use 'fed up with' not 'fed up of.' 'This views' mixes singular demonstrative with plural noun; use 'these views.' The clause 'I want to feel' is incomplete and vague; provide an object or idea, e.g. 'experience something different' to complete the thought and make the sentence grammatically and semantically correct.