视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitation and repetition; give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words and more precise vocabulary (e.g. landscapes, scenery, wildlife). Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views because I am an artistic person. For example, I often photograph landscapes and wildlife in parks, focusing on composition and natural light to capture mood.

建議: Avoid fillers like “umm” and reduce repetition. Start with a clear preference sentence, then provide specific reasons and a brief example. Use cohesive phrases such as “because,” “for example,” or “as a result.”

範例: I prefer rural views because they offer more natural scenery and a peaceful atmosphere. For example, I enjoy photographing sunlit fields and lakes where the light and reflections create a mystical feeling.

建議: Be more fluent and precise: state your preference clearly, then give specific reasons and an illustrative example. Replace vague words like “new” with concrete benefits (e.g. diverse architecture, unfamiliar landscapes, cultural scenes).

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer diverse landscapes and cultural scenes I don’t see at home. For instance, when I travel I photograph colorful street markets and historic buildings that are very different from Norway.

× Yeah, I, I could, I could like that.

✓ Yes, I could. I like that.

The original is repetitive and uses 'could' unnecessarily; pronoun 'I' repeated is nonstandard in written form. Use 'Yes, I could' or simply 'Yes, I like that' to be clear and grammatically correct. Keep a single pronoun and appropriate modal or present verb to match meaning.

× I'm, I'm an artistic person, so I, I like, like to take photos of nature and beautiful things around me.

✓ I'm an artistic person, so I like to take photos of nature and beautiful things around me.

Repeated pronouns and filler words ('I'm, I'm', 'I, I', 'like, like') are disfluent speech; remove duplicates for grammatical correctness. The pronoun use is fine once repetitions are removed.

× I would say I prefer rural areas because it's more umm, more nature and more like umm, more mystical, more umm and a lot of sun, a lot of maybe water in the background.

✓ I would say I prefer rural areas because there is more nature, it feels more mystical, and there is often a lot of sun and maybe water in the background.

'It's more...more nature' is awkward: use 'there is more nature' (there be issue and clarity). Also avoid repeated fillers. Use simple present 'there is' and 'it feels' to describe general preferences and conditions. This corrects the expression and sentence structure.

× I, I like that area.

✓ I like that area.

Remove repeated pronoun 'I' to correct spoken disfluency. The sentence is otherwise correct in present tense.

× I definitely love umm, I prefer views from other countries because, uh, that's new.

✓ I definitely prefer views from other countries because they are new to me.

Mixed verbs 'I definitely love, I prefer' and vague 'that's new' are awkward. Maintain consistent present tense and clarify the subject: 'views from other countries' is plural, so use 'they are new to me.' This addresses tense consistency and pronoun reference.

× You can take uh, pictures, uh, from new culture, new people, different things from my country, Norway.

✓ You can take pictures of a new culture, new people, and different things compared to my country, Norway.

Use 'pictures of' not 'pictures from' in this context. 'New culture' should be 'a new culture'; include articles and parallel structure in the list. Also clarify comparison with 'compared to my country' to show contrast. This fixes preposition use and article/order of words.