视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and use correct tense and clearer sequence. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammatical errors (use present simple/present perfect) and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel abroad I usually take many photos of landscapes and buildings, but because I take so many my phone gets full, so I regularly organize my gallery to delete duplicates and keep my favorites.

建議: Give a clear preference or say you have no strong preference, then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use coherent sentences and correct word choice (countryside, rural).

範例: I don't have a strong preference between urban and rural views because each offers something different. For instance, I enjoy the peaceful landscapes and open space in the countryside, while cities appeal to me for their architecture and lively streets.

建議: Answer directly: state preference or say you have no strong preference. Use correct vocabulary (preference, prepare) and give a clear example with past tense for past trips. Link ideas with words like 'for example' or 'for instance'.

範例: I don't have a strong preference, but I often enjoy views in other countries because they offer different styles and cultures. For example, when I went to Paris I was impressed by the beautiful architecture and charming street scenes, which are very different from what I see at home.

× Yes, I really love taking pictures, so usually when I go abroad or traveled I took a picture a lot.

✓ Yes, I really love taking pictures, so usually when I go abroad I take a lot of pictures.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses: 'go' (present) with 'traveled' and 'took' (past). Maintain consistent present tense because the speaker describes a habitual action. Change 'traveled' to be removed and 'took a picture a lot' to 'take a lot of pictures' to match present habitual aspect and correct plural form for 'pictures'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions (I go abroad -> I take pictures).

× So unfortunately I don't have that much space in my phone, so I have to organize my phone and also when I saw the picture I took again I can't remember.

✓ So unfortunately I don't have much space on my phone, so I have to organize it, and when I look at the pictures I took I can't remember them.

'that much' is acceptable but 'much' is more natural here; 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone' (incorrect preposition). Repetition 'organize my phone' is awkward; use 'organize it'. 'when I saw' mixes past with present 'can't remember'; use present 'look at' for current habit. 'the picture I took' should be plural 'the pictures I took' and add object pronoun 'them' for clarity. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and correct preposition 'on'.

× How do you say, boys? I don't have any specific and since I love it usually just I enjoy it going lular countryside it and also cities.

✓ I don't have any specific preference; I usually enjoy photographing both the countryside and cities.

The original has fragmented structure, unnecessary filler 'How do you say, boys?', incorrect word 'lular', repeated 'it', and poor word order. Reframe into a clear sentence stating no specific preference and parallel objects 'the countryside and cities'. Suggestion: remove fillers and use parallel structure for clarity.

× I think there are different, uh, there are different.

✓ I think there are many differences.

The original repeats a phrase without completing it. Use a complete clause to express the idea: 'there are many differences' or 'they are different in many ways'. Maintain present tense. Suggestion: avoid repetition and finish the thought.

× Uh, actually I don't have a strong preparations, but I usually prepare to go outside.

✓ Actually I don't do a lot of preparation, but I usually plan to go abroad.

'a strong preparations' is ungrammatical: 'preparations' is plural so remove 'a' and 'strong' is awkward here. Context indicates the speaker means preparing for trips abroad; 'prepare to go outside' is incorrect phrase for traveling abroad. Use 'plan to go abroad' or 'prepare for trips'. Suggestion: match number between article and noun and choose appropriate verb phrases for travel context.

× I mean abroad, especially when I went to Paris, the architecture was so beautiful and also the street and the scenes.

✓ I mean abroad; for example, when I went to Paris, the architecture, the streets, and the scenery were so beautiful.

The sentence uses past tense 'went' and 'was' correctly for a past experience, but 'the street and the scenes' is ungrammatical and inconsistent in number. Use plural 'streets' and 'scenery' (uncountable) and plural verb 'were' to agree with the list. Also clarify list with commas. Suggestion: ensure parallel nouns and subject-verb agreement when listing multiple items.