视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Mejorar la claridad y corrección gramatical, evitar repeticiones y añadir un enunciado temático claro. Sea más específico sobre qué le atrae de esos sujetos y use conectores simples para ordenar la información.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, in the city I often photograph buildings because I like their architecture, and I also capture small birds when I find quiet spots in parks. These subjects interest me because they show contrast between busy urban life and peaceful nature.

建議: Corregir la fluidez y eliminar muletillas y repeticiones. Empiece con una frase temática que responda directamente, luego explique brevemente por qué disfruta ambos entornos, usando conectores (for example, and, but).

範例: I don't have a strong preference; I like both urban and rural views. For example, I enjoy urban areas because of interesting architecture and busy streets, and I also like rural scenes for their peaceful landscapes and natural light.

建議: Reducir muletillas (uh), organizar la respuesta con una idea principal y detalles concretos. Añada una comparación breve si menciona otras países para mostrar preferencia o no. Sea preciso en la elección de palabras (e.g., glaciers vs. icebergs correctamente según contexto).

範例: I prefer taking photos in my own country because it has diverse landscapes. For instance, the north has deserts, the central region features busy urban centers, and the south offers glaciers and icy coastlines, which together create many unique photo opportunities.

× Yes, when I'm in the city and I like to take pictures of different things, I like to take pictures of city buildings or little birds that in the in the places that I can go.

✓ Yes, when I'm in the city I like taking pictures of different things; I enjoy photographing city buildings or little birds in the places I visit.

El estudiante repite estructuras y usa formas verbales inconsistentes. En inglés es más natural usar 'I like taking pictures' en lugar de 'I like to take pictures' repetidamente. Se eliminó la repetición 'in the in the' y se corrigió la frase incompleta 'that in the in the places that I can go' a 'in the places I visit' para claridad y fluidez. Sugerencia: usa gerundios para hablar de hábitos ('I like taking...') y simplifica frases evitando repeticiones.

× I don't have a preference in this question 'cause I am from from the rural area of the city and when I'm going to the urban C city area I'd like to take pictures of of them and I'd like to take picture of the rural places.

✓ I don't have a preference because I'm from a rural area, and when I go to the city I like to take pictures there, and I also like to take pictures of rural places.

El estudiante repite palabras ('from from', 'of of') y usa pronombre demostrativo impreciso 'them' sin antecedente claro. Se cambió 'in this question' por 'I don't have a preference' más natural sin 'in this question', 'cause' por 'because', y 'urban C city area' a 'the city'. Se añadió 'there' para referirse a la ciudad y se armonizó la estructura paralela 'like to take pictures' y 'like to take pictures of rural places'. Sugerencia: evita repeticiones y usa pronombres claros o nombres concretos.

× I think my country is a very beautiful place. We have the desert in the north, uh, the urban cities in the central of the country and the South we have a lot of glaciers and icebergs. So my country is, uh, very popular, uh, place to take pictures.

✓ I think my country is a very beautiful place. We have a desert in the north, urban cities in the center of the country, and in the south we have many glaciers and icebergs. So my country is a very popular place to take pictures.

Errores en el uso de preposiciones y artículos: se usa 'in the central of the country' que debe ser 'in the center of the country' o 'in central parts of the country'. 'The South we have' se corrigió a 'in the south we have'. Se cambió 'a lot of' por 'many' para sustantivos contables y se eliminó la coma y pausas innecesarias. Sugerencia: usa 'in the north/center/south' para indicar regiones y asegúrate de la concordancia con artículos.