视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers ("you know"), correct verb forms and articles, and make the description specific. Use one linking phrase to add an example or reason. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially natural scenery. I often take photos of mountains and forests when I go for walks because the light in the early morning is very dramatic. For example, last month I captured a misty mountain ridge that looked breathtaking.

建議: Answer directly with a clear preference sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Remove hesitations and correct small mistakes ("the this"). Use relevant vocabulary ("countryside", "serene").

範例: I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban ones because I enjoy the peaceful atmosphere of the countryside. For example, I like looking at rivers and forests since they help me relax after a busy week.

建議: Give a clear, direct answer first (prefer both / prefer abroad / prefer home), then support it with specific reasons and one example. Fix grammar (remove redundant conjunctions, use singular/plural correctly) and replace vague phrases like "we do not have a lot" with precise statements. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I enjoy both domestic and foreign views, but I often prefer visiting other countries for more varied natural scenery. For instance, although my country has beautiful historical sites like Khiva, I travel to places such as China to photograph mountains and forests.

× Yeah, I like taking pictures of different views, especially views of the nature.

✓ Yeah, I like taking pictures of different views, especially views of nature.

'The' before 'nature' is unnecessary when speaking about nature in general. Use the uncountable noun 'nature' without the definite article.'

× I like, you know, taking photos of this beautiful scenery.

✓ I like, you know, taking photos of beautiful scenery.

'This' before 'beautiful scenery' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Also 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and normally used without 'this'. Remove 'this' to make the sentence natural.'

× For example, when I go out and walk on the street, I prefer to taking photos of mountains and forest.

✓ For example, when I go out and walk on the street, I prefer to take photos of mountains and forests.

After 'prefer' use the base form of the verb ('to take' or 'taking' but not 'to taking'). Also 'forest' should be plural 'forests' to match 'mountains' or use 'the forest' if singular. Here plural is natural.'

× It is very brief day, it can bring breathtaking.

✓ It is a very brief day, and it can be breathtaking.

Original has awkward structure and missing article. Use 'a very brief day' and join clauses with 'and'. Also 'bring breathtaking' is incorrect; use 'be breathtaking' or 'bring a breathtaking view'.'

× Well, it's very interesting question.

✓ Well, it's a very interesting question.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'very interesting question'. Use 'a' because 'question' is a singular countable noun.'

× I do think I prefer views or rural areas more than urban areas because I like, you know, natural atmosphere of mountains, rivers and forests.

✓ I do think I prefer rural views more than urban ones because I like the natural atmosphere of mountains, rivers, and forests.

Use 'rural views' instead of 'views or rural areas'. Use 'urban ones' to avoid repetition. 'The natural atmosphere' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific type of atmosphere. Commas added in list.'

× So I like the this natural and genuine atmosphere.

✓ So I like this natural and genuine atmosphere.

Using both 'the' and 'this' is redundant. Choose one; 'this' is appropriate when pointing out a specific atmosphere.'

× Although in my country we do not have a lot of natural scenery such as mountains and forests, but we have a historical places such as Hiva in Uzbekistan.

✓ Although in my country we do not have a lot of natural scenery such as mountains and forests, we have historical places such as Khiva in Uzbekistan.

Do not use 'although' and 'but' together; remove 'but'. 'A' is incorrect before plural 'places'. Also correct proper noun 'Khiva' spelling. Use 'historical places' without 'a'.'

× So I prepare both views in my country and foreign countries such as China.

✓ So I appreciate views in both my country and foreign countries such as China.

'Prepare' is incorrect verb here. Context requires 'appreciate' or 'enjoy'. Also reorder to 'views in both my country and foreign countries' for clarity.'