视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition, and correct small grammar errors (e.g., “different kinds of views,” remove extra words like “of and for”).

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I travel I always bring my camera and focus on mountains and lush green landscapes because I find nature calming and visually striking.

建議: Give a direct answer and support it with concise, specific reasons. Remove hesitations like “uh” and avoid repeating words. Use linking words such as “because” or “as” to connect ideas and correct grammar (e.g., avoid “which I love them”).

範例: I prefer urban views because the modern architecture and tall buildings create striking compositions. For instance, I enjoy photographing city skylines at sunset to capture the contrast between glass towers and warm light.

建議: Answer directly and give a specific reason or example. Avoid vague claims like “I know each and every part” and remove fillers and repetitions. Offer one concrete detail or memory to make the response believable and engaging.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I’m familiar with many scenic spots and local seasons. For example, I often visit a coastal region near my hometown where the cliffs and sea light change dramatically throughout the year, so I can plan shoots for the best conditions.

× Yes, I'm a photogenic person and I love to take pictures of different kind of views.

✓ Yes, I'm a photogenic person and I love to take pictures of different kinds of views.

The phrase 'different kind of views' uses a singular 'kind' with 'different', which requires the plural 'kinds' or 'a different kind of' with singular noun. Use 'different kinds of views' to indicate multiple types. Suggestion: say 'different kinds of views' or 'different kinds of scenery.'

× I'm very close to nature so I whenever I travel I take my camera with me and I take a lot of pictures of mountains of and for the greenery.

✓ I'm very close to nature, so whenever I travel I take my camera with me and take a lot of pictures of mountains and the greenery.

The original has word order and extra prepositions ('of and for') that are incorrect and redundant. Remove the extra words and place commas correctly: 'so whenever I travel' flows better. Use 'mountains and the greenery' to coordinate nouns. Suggestion: keep clauses concise and avoid unnecessary prepositions.

× I love to capture views in urban areas because urban areas are more, uh, stylish and modern and uh, there are so many tall buildings in the urban areas which I love them.

✓ I love to capture views in urban areas because they are more stylish and modern, and there are so many tall buildings which I love.

The clause 'which I love them' incorrectly uses both a relative pronoun and an object pronoun. Remove 'them' because 'which' already refers to 'tall buildings.' Also replace the repeated noun 'urban areas' with the pronoun 'they' to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: use 'which' without an extra object pronoun and replace repeated nouns with pronouns.

× I prefer views in my own country because I know each and every part of my country.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I know every part of it.

The original is grammatically acceptable but wordy. 'Each and every part of my country' is repetitive; 'every part of it' is more natural. No verb agreement error, but simplifying improves fluency. Suggestion: use concise pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition.

× My country is so big and beautiful. There are so many, uh, capture, capture.

✓ My country is so big and beautiful. There are so many places to capture.

The fragment 'There are so many, uh, capture, capture' is incomplete and uses a verb where a noun phrase is needed. Replace with 'places to capture' (noun + infinitive) to express locations worth photographing. Suggestion: think of the noun or noun phrase required after 'there are' (e.g., 'places', 'scenes').