视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần rút gọn câu trả lời, sửa ngữ pháp và dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng (một câu chủ đề + 1-2 câu bổ trợ). Tránh lặp từ và tiếng ỳ/tiếng ngập ngừng (um, uh). Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác như “a big passion” → “a big passion” thay bằng “a great passion” hoặc “a hobby I really enjoy”; sửa động từ và cụm từ: “which capture” → “that captures” hoặc “and it captures”. Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu, thêm một ví dụ ngắn để cụ thể hóa (ví dụ: “I often photograph sunsets and city skylines”).

範例: Yes, I do. Photography is a hobby I really enjoy because it captures beautiful moments of the scenery around me. For example, I often photograph sunsets and landscapes to preserve those memories.

建議: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng (nêu ưu tiên), loại bỏ tiếng ỳ/tiếng ngập ngừng và sửa ngữ pháp. Nói rõ lý do cụ thể và hợp lý (ví dụ: không khí yên bình, thiên nhiên, ít ô nhiễm) và dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, because, therefore). Tránh câu mơ hồ như “making me eat more” — không liên quan tới câu hỏi; nếu muốn nói về cảm giác thì diễn đạt rõ ràng (e.g., “it helps me relax”). Giữ 2–3 câu ngắn gọn.

範例: I prefer rural views to those in big cities because the countryside is calmer and less polluted. For example, the quiet fields and green hills help me relax and take better photos of natural scenes.

建議: Cần trả lời trực tiếp (Yes, I prefer views in my own country) và tránh sai ngữ pháp như “I would like to do the views”. Nên nói lý do cụ thể (văn hóa, familiar locations, diversity of landscapes) và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Tránh lặp từ và giảm tiếng ỳ/tiếng ngập ngừng. Giữ 2–3 câu, ví dụ hóa bằng một địa danh cụ thể (e.g., Ha Long Bay, Mekong Delta).

範例: Yes, I prefer the views in my own country, Vietnam, because I am familiar with its diverse landscapes. For instance, I love photographing Ha Long Bay in the north and the Mekong Delta in the south because each region offers unique scenery.

× Umm taking photos is one of my big passion in daily activities which capture my beautiful moments of the scenery around me and uh, show me a spectacular perspective of life.

✓ Taking photos is one of my biggest passions in my daily life; it captures beautiful moments of the scenery around me and shows me a spectacular perspective on life.

The original has issues with verb + -ing form used as a noun phrase and with noun/adjective forms. 'Taking photos' as a gerund phrase is fine, but 'one of my big passion' should be 'one of my biggest passions' (plural noun with superlative). 'In daily activities' is awkward — use 'in my daily life'. Relative clause 'which capture' must agree with 'it' or 'photos': here the writer refers to the activity as a whole, so use singular 'it captures' or refer to 'photos' and use 'they capture'. Similarly 'show me' should agree: 'and shows me'. Also use 'perspective on life' rather than 'perspective of life'. Suggested changes fix verb forms and noun number and improve idiomatic phrasing.

× Absolutely, I have a reference uh, the views in rural areas over UMM in large cities.

✓ Absolutely, I prefer the views in rural areas over those in large cities.

The phrase 'I have a reference' is incorrect for expressing preference; use 'I prefer'. 'UMM' seems to be a typo; 'in' before 'large cities' is fine but needs a comparison object: 'those in large cities'. Also 'over' can be used but clarity improves with 'prefer ... over ...'. This corrects preposition and word choice issues.

× Basically because of some reason.

✓ Basically, for several reasons.

The original is an incomplete sentence and awkward ('because of some reason' is vague and non-idiomatic). Replace with 'Basically, for several reasons' or 'There are several reasons' to provide a grammatically complete and natural transition.

× First of all, umm in rural areas I really enjoy the laid back ambience around me so making me eat uh more.

✓ First of all, in rural areas I really enjoy the laid-back ambience, which makes me feel more relaxed.

'Around me' is unnecessary and 'so making me eat uh more' is ungrammatical and unclear ('eat more' seems unintended). Use a relative clause 'which makes me feel more relaxed' to explain the effect of the ambience. Also hyphenate 'laid-back' and adjust pronoun reference and verb form ('makes' for third-person singular subject 'ambience').

× Yeah, I am. I would like to do uh, the views in my old country, especially Vietnam, uh, with spectacular view, umm, around the area from South to north, umm, which uh, captivate me.

✓ Yes. I would like to see the views in my home country, especially Vietnam, which has spectacular scenery from south to north that captivates me.

'I am. I would like to do the views' is incorrect; 'do the views' should be 'see the views' or 'take photos of the views'. 'Old country' should be 'home country'. 'With spectacular view' should be plural 'spectacular scenery' and 'from South to north' should be 'from south to north'. 'Which uh, captivate me' must agree in number with 'scenery' or 'country' — use singular 'that captivates me' if referring to 'scenery' or 'country'. The corrections address incorrect verb phrases, article/word choice, pluralization, and subject-verb agreement.