视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify vocabulary and correct mistakes, keep answers concise and natural, and add one or two specific details linked logically. Avoid incorrect words like “words” for “views” and “sex” for “sects/skins/sex” (probably meant “species”). Use linking words (for example, “and”/“also”) to connect ideas. Aim for 2–4 clear sentences with correct nouns and collocations.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me relax and appreciate nature. For example, when I walk in a park I photograph tree shapes and local bird species, which also teaches me about wildlife. This hobby makes my walks more interesting and calm.

建議: Use correct nouns and avoid unnecessary words like “bills” and “Thank you.” Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one supporting reason and a brief example or consequence using a linking word such as “because” or “so.” Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are much less polluted and quieter than cities. As a result, I can relax more and enjoy fresh air when I go for walks in the countryside.

建議: Be precise and avoid incorrect words like “wheels.” Begin with a direct statement (e.g. “I like both”) then add two specific reasons using linking words such as “because” and “for example.” Keep sentences compact and avoid repetition of phrases like “too” and “really.”

範例: I like views both in my country and abroad because each place offers different cultural scenes and landscapes. For example, at home I enjoy familiar traditional architecture, while abroad I love discovering new languages, foods and lifestyles.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different words.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

The student used 'words' which is a wrong word choice here; the intended noun is 'views'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammatical inflection error. Replace incorrect word with the appropriate noun to match the question about 'views'.

× It helps me to relax and enjoy the nature very much.

✓ It helps me relax and enjoy nature very much.

'The nature' is incorrect here because 'nature' is an uncountable general noun and does not usually take the definite article. Also 'helps me to relax' is acceptable but more natural is 'helps me relax'. Remove 'the' and optionally omit 'to' for idiomatic phrasing.

× I can also gain knowledge about different types of trees and sex and animals around different places.

✓ I can also learn about different types of trees, plants and animals in different places.

The phrase 'sex and animals' is incorrect and likely a typo; 'sex' should be 'plants' or similar. Also 'gain knowledge about' is wordy; 'learn about' is more natural. Use commas to separate items and 'in different places' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× I prefer bills in rural areas because it is way less polluted than urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they are much less polluted than urban areas.

'Bills' is an incorrect word; the student likely meant 'views'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'views' (plural) requires 'they are' rather than 'it is'. 'Way' is informal; use 'much' for more formal speech.

× It helps me to relax.

✓ They help me relax.

If referring to 'views' (plural) from the previous sentence, the pronoun should be 'they' and the verb 'help' should be plural: 'They help me relax.' The original 'It helps me to relax' used a singular pronoun inconsistent with plural noun. Ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× I can breathe healthy air in rural areas.

✓ I can breathe healthy air in rural areas.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable. 'Healthy air' is natural and matches the context. No change needed.

× I prefer both wheels in my country and in other countries too because I can learn different culture, language, lifestyle from other countries too and I can really gain more knowledge of all the new things.

✓ I prefer both views in my country and in other countries because I can learn about different cultures, languages and lifestyles, and really gain knowledge about many new things.

Multiple issues: 'wheels' is the wrong word—should be 'views'. Also use plural forms 'cultures, languages, lifestyles' when speaking generally. Include 'about' after 'learn' and use commas to separate items. Remove the repeated 'too' and tighten phrasing ('gain knowledge about many new things'). This fixes word choice, plurality, preposition use, and redundancy.