视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu và sự rõ ràng: Trả lời trực tiếp trước rồi giải thích ngắn gọn; tránh lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'I can remember and record'). Dùng liên từ phù hợp để nối ý (because, so) và giữ tối đa 3–4 câu. Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

範例: Yes, I do. I like taking pictures because they help me remember special moments and share them with my family and friends. For example, when I visit a new city I always take photos of the streets and buildings so I can show my parents later.

建議: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc và từ vựng chính xác: Trả lời rõ ràng 'urban' hoặc 'rural' đầu tiên, sửa lỗi collocation (say 'urban areas are beautiful but crowded') và dùng liên từ để giải thích lý do. Tránh từ không phù hợp như 'you' thay vì 'urban'. Nên thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: kiến trúc hiện đại).

範例: I prefer urban areas because I enjoy photographing modern architecture and busy streets. Although cities can be crowded, the variety of buildings and lights makes for interesting photos, such as glass skyscrapers and lively markets.

建議: Làm rõ ý chính và sửa ngữ pháp: Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng ('I prefer views in other countries') rồi giải thích lý do cụ thể. Tránh cấu trúc mơ hồ ('about future') và dùng từ chính xác như 'landscapes', 'culture' hoặc 'architecture'. Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về điều bạn muốn khám phá sẽ giúp câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because I can discover new places and different cultures that I have never seen. For instance, I would love to photograph traditional villages and mountain landscapes in Japan because they are very different from what I see at home.

× I think just because I can remember and record this in my brain and in my phone so I realize this, I can so for my friend and my family.

✓ I think it's because I can remember and record things in my brain and on my phone, so I can share them with my friends and my family.

The sentence uses incorrect and inconsistent pronouns and determiners (this, so for). Use 'it' as a dummy subject and plural 'things' for unspecified items. Use 'on my phone' for recorded items and 'share them with my friends and my family' to express the intended meaning. Also simplify the sentence structure for clarity.

× I think uh yes, I like you in urban area because it is a landscape, beautiful landscape and instead a very crowded. So I can see all modern picture in my photo.

✓ I think I prefer urban areas because they have beautiful landscapes, although they are very crowded. So I can take photos of modern scenes.

Prepositions and articles are incorrect: use 'prefer urban areas' rather than 'like you in urban area'. Use plural 'areas' and 'they' to refer back. Use 'take photos of' rather than 'see all modern picture in my photo'. Replace 'instead' with 'although' to show contrast.

× I think yes, I like have you in other country because I can see a lot of thing I don't know and I can explore a lot of beautiful landscape about future. So I very like this.

✓ I think I prefer visiting other countries because I can see many things I don't know and explore many beautiful landscapes. I really like that.

Pronouns and verb forms are incorrect: remove 'you' which is inappropriate, use 'prefer visiting' or 'prefer to visit', plural 'things' and 'landscapes'. 'About future' is unclear and unnecessary; use 'I really like that' for natural emphasis. Also fix word order and use adverb 'really' correctly.