视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g. 'views' not 'youth'), avoid redundancy, and limit to 2–4 sentences. Use one or two specific examples to support your idea and a linking word to connect them (e.g. 'for example' or 'because').

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember trips and special events. For example, I always photograph city skylines and coastal sunsets so I can revisit those memories later.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and add one specific reason with a linking word. Correct grammar (e.g. 'prefer urban areas' not 'prefer use in urban area') and avoid vague words like 'more' or 'most appropriate' without explanation.

範例: I prefer views in urban areas because they are more convenient to access and offer diverse architecture. For instance, city streets and parks provide interesting contrasts and photo opportunities within short distances.

建議: Make your answer fluent and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear statement, then give 1–2 specific reasons and an example using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Use concise phrases (e.g. 'I prefer views in other countries because...').

範例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering different cultures and landscapes. For example, when I travel abroad I photograph local markets and historical sites to learn about traditions and keep unique memories.

× Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different youth 'cause it helps me to remind some my trips, some my special events in my life.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember some of my trips and special events in my life.

The student used 'youth' instead of 'views' (wrong word) and incorrect pronouns/possessives: 'it helps me to remind some my trips' is ungrammatical. Plural 'views' must match plural pronoun 'they'. Use 'help me remember' rather than 'helps me to remind'. Include 'some of my trips' for correct quantifier and 'special events in my life' is fine. Maintain present simple to express habitual preference.

× And of course it's so memorable for me and I'm just enjoying to watching some videos or maybe.

✓ And of course it's very memorable for me and I just enjoy watching some videos, maybe.

'Enjoying to watching' is incorrect: English uses 'enjoy' + gerund, so 'enjoy watching'. Also 'so memorable' is colloquial; 'very memorable' is better. Removed trailing 'or maybe' fragment and placed 'maybe' at end. Kept present continuous simplified to simple present 'I just enjoy' to express habitual action.

× I prefer use in urban area 'cause it is more. Convenient for me and most appropriate.

✓ I prefer urban areas because they are more convenient and appropriate for me.

'I prefer use in urban area' is ungrammatical; 'prefer' should be followed by a noun phrase: 'I prefer urban areas'. Use plural 'areas' and plural pronoun 'they' with 'are'. 'More. Convenient' had an unnecessary period and word order issues; combine into 'more convenient and appropriate'. This keeps present tense for preferences.

× I I prefer you so in other countries, 'cause it is interesting, it is more interesting and significant for me, 'cause I like traveling, I like trips, I like just other cultures and it is more pleasant for me than just my country.

✓ I prefer other countries because they are more interesting and meaningful to me; I like traveling, learning about other cultures, and visiting new places, and that is more enjoyable than staying in my own country.

Original contains 'I I prefer you so' (nonsense) and mixes singular/plural pronouns incorrectly: 'it is more interesting' should refer to 'other countries' so use 'they are'. 'Significant for me' better as 'meaningful to me'. 'I like trips' is awkward; use 'visiting new places'. Use parallel structure for 'I like traveling, learning about other cultures, and visiting new places'. Maintain present simple to state preferences.