视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct word choice, and finish the idea. Use one or two supporting details with linking words. Also correct grammar (e.g. 'take pictures', 'sharing my pictures on social media').

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because they help me remember special moments and places. For example, I often photograph sunsets and landscapes and then share them on social media so my friends can see where I’ve been.

建議: Answer directly with a clear preference, avoid repeating words, use correct vocabulary (e.g. 'rural areas', 'open sky', 'fewer buildings' or 'dynamic city life'). Provide one specific reason and an example, and use a linking word like 'because' or 'however'.

範例: I prefer rural areas because they offer peaceful scenery and wide open skies. For example, I enjoy hiking in the countryside where there are mountains and quiet fields, which helps me relax.

建議: State your preference clearly and use correct sentence structure and vocabulary (e.g. 'I prefer views in my own country'). Give a specific reason and an example, avoid unnecessary words. Mentioning a comparison briefly can help.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because Vietnam has many beautiful mountains and varied landscapes. For example, I often visit Ha Long Bay and the northern highlands, which I find more familiar and meaningful than views abroad.

× I really like capturing, uh, beautiful century, uh, it helps me remember, uh, special, special moments and uh, places.

✓ I really like capturing beautiful scenery; it helps me remember special moments and places.

The original sentence uses the wrong noun 'century' instead of 'scenery' and has punctuation and structure issues. This is a sentence structure and word choice error: replace 'century' with 'scenery', remove filler words, and connect the two independent clauses with a semicolon or a conjunction to improve clarity.

× Uh, I really like take picture because I enjoy sharing my picture on.

✓ I really like taking pictures because I enjoy sharing them online.

After 'like' the gerund form is required, so 'take' should be 'taking' and 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match general preference. 'My picture on' is incomplete and incorrect; use 'sharing them online' to indicate where the pictures are shared. Also replace the singular possessive with the pronoun 'them' for natural reference.

× Actually, I enjoy the beautiful scenery in Ru in rural area, because in rural there's lots of a building, there's lots of a sky cyber.

✓ Actually, I enjoy the beautiful scenery in rural areas, because there are lots of buildings and wide skies.

Use plural 'rural areas' to refer generally to countryside (singular 'rural area' could work but must be consistent). 'There's lots of a building' is incorrect: use 'there are lots of buildings' for plural agreement. 'Sky cyber' is incorrect word choice; 'wide skies' or 'open skies' is appropriate. Also correct subject-verb agreement ('there are' for plural) and remove unnecessary articles.

× So I I love the dynamic life.

✓ So I love the dynamic life.

The repeated 'I' is a spoken disfluency; remove the duplicate. The sentence is otherwise acceptable, though 'dynamic life' could be more natural as 'the dynamic pace of life' depending on intended meaning.

× Actually, I love you in my country, inspector, other countries because in my country it's simple Vietnam and there's lots of mountain, uh, umm, beautiful, attractive.

✓ Actually, I prefer my country to other countries because Vietnam is simple and has many beautiful mountains and attractions.

This sentence has multiple errors: 'love you in my country, inspector, other countries' is unintelligible—likely meant 'prefer my country to other countries.' Use 'prefer X to Y' for comparisons. 'It's simple Vietnam' should be 'Vietnam is simple' or 'my country, Vietnam, is simple.' 'There's lots of mountain' must be pluralized and changed to 'has many mountains.' 'Beautiful, attractive' is redundant; use 'beautiful mountains and attractions' for clarity. Fix word order and pronoun misuse.