视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan kejelasan. Jawaban perlu kalimat topik yang jelas, hindari pengulangan, dan lengkapi alasan dengan struktur yang benar. Gunakan linking words singkat untuk menghubungkan ide (mis. because, so, and). Perbaiki kesalahan seperti "I like capture" menjadi "I like to capture" dan hilangkan frasa yang tidak lengkap seperti "especially the place where there are many animals" — gantikan dengan frasa yang lebih jelas seperti "places with abundant wildlife". Usahakan maksimal 3–4 kalimat.

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different types of scenery, such as the sky, mountains and beaches, because each setting offers unique colors and light. I also like capturing wildlife, especially in places with abundant animals, since their behavior makes photos more interesting.

建議: Perbaiki repetisi dan tata bahasa. Jawaban sudah jelas namun ada pengulangan "has open has open spaces" yang perlu diperbaiki. Tambahkan satu alasan konkret atau contoh untuk memperkaya jawaban dan gunakan linking word seperti "because" atau "so" dengan tepat. Batasi jawaban menjadi 2–3 kalimat untuk naturalitas.

範例: I prefer rural areas because they are more tranquil and less crowded than cities. The countryside has wide open spaces, so I can walk freely and enjoy nature without constant traffic noise.

建議: Berikan struktur yang lebih jelas: mulai dengan topik singkat, lalu bandingkan secara spesifik. Hindari kata-kata ambigu seperti "other countries views" — gunakan "views in other countries" atau contoh konkret seperti "the Northern Lights" dan jelaskan mengapa. Tambahkan linking word seperti "however" atau "but" dengan tepat serta jangan gabungkan terlalu banyak ide dalam satu kalimat.

範例: It's hard to choose because my country has many beautiful landscapes; however, I would like to see views in other countries, such as the Northern Lights, because they are unique and unlike anything seen at home.

× Wildlife, especially the place where there are many animals I like capture that kind of picture because it.

✓ Wildlife, especially places where there are many animals, I like to capture that kind of picture because of that.

The sentence has word order and missing infinitive issues. 'place' should be plural 'places' (agreement with 'many animals') and the verb 'capture' needs the infinitive 'to capture'. Also add commas and 'of that' to make the reason clear. Suggestion: restructure as 'I like to capture wildlife, especially places where there are many animals, because of that.' Grammar problem type ID: 13

× The countryside has an open has open spaces so I can walk freely without the noise of the city.

✓ The countryside has open spaces so I can walk freely without the noise of the city.

There is a duplicated phrase 'has an open has open' and an unnecessary article 'an' before 'open spaces'. Remove the repetition and the article. Suggestion: 'The countryside has open spaces so I can walk freely without the noise of the city.' Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I would prefer to see other countries views like Northern Lights.

✓ I would prefer to see views in other countries, like the Northern Lights.

The phrase 'other countries views' needs a preposition 'in' or possessive form; better is 'views in other countries'. Also 'Northern Lights' should be preceded by 'the'. Suggestion: 'I would prefer to see views in other countries, like the Northern Lights.' Grammar problem type ID: 8