视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and use natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid awkward expressions like "sense of affection" and redundant phrases such as "and so many others."

範例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing natural landscapes, such as mountains and seascapes, because I love the colours and peaceful atmosphere. For example, last year I spent a weekend capturing sunrise over a nearby beach, which produced some of my favourite photos.

建議: Make your preference clear in the first sentence and support it with specific reasons using correct grammar. Replace vague words like "suitable for me" and awkward phrasing like "are become polite" with precise descriptions.

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones. Rural areas feel calmer and less crowded, so I can relax and focus on details like fields and old cottages. For instance, when I visit the countryside I often find quiet lanes and colourful meadows that are great for photography.

建議: Answer directly and give a clear reason with specific detail. Correct grammar ("views are" not "view are") and avoid vague terms like "comfortable" and "suitable for me"—explain what you mean by peaceful and calming with an example.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel more familiar and peaceful. For example, the quiet lakes and small coastal towns here are calming and remind me of childhood holidays, so I feel more relaxed photographing them than I do in busy foreign cities.

× Of course, I always had a sense of affection of taking pictures of different views, particularly in natural views and mountains, along with sea, beach and so many others.

✓ Of course, I have always had a sense of affection for taking pictures of different views, particularly natural scenes and mountains, along with the sea, beaches and many others.

The original uses incorrect prepositions and word forms: 'had' should be present perfect 'have always had' to indicate continuing feeling; 'affection of' is wrong—use 'affection for'; 'in natural views' is awkward—use 'natural scenes' or 'in nature'; 'along with sea, beach' needs articles and plural: 'the sea, beaches'; avoid 'so many others' and use 'many others'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('for', 'in') and appropriate articles and plural forms.

× Actually pretty much both, but mostly I guess enjoy rural areas compared to urban areas views because rural areas are become polite and peaceful along with suitable for me.

✓ Actually, pretty much both, but I mostly enjoy rural areas compared to urban areas because rural areas have become quieter and more peaceful and are more suitable for me.

Multiple tense and word choice errors: 'mostly I guess enjoy' is awkward—reorder to 'I mostly enjoy' and remove 'guess' or keep as 'I guess I mostly enjoy'. 'are become' is incorrect; use present perfect 'have become' or present 'are'—here 'have become' or 'are' fits; 'polite' is wrong for places—use 'quiet' or 'peaceful'; 'along with suitable for me' is incorrect structure—use 'and are more suitable for me'. Suggestion: put verbs in proper order, use appropriate adjectives for places, and fix verb forms.

× Basically, my country's view are really comfortable compared to other countries and I find it suitable for me for the simple fact that it's very peaceful and calming.

✓ Basically, my country's views are really comfortable compared to those in other countries, and I find them suitable for me because they are very peaceful and calming.

Subject-verb and noun number issues: 'my country's view are' mixes singular possessive with plural verb—use 'views are' or 'the view is'. 'Compared to other countries' needs 'those in other countries' to clarify comparison. 'I find it suitable' is unclear—use 'I find them suitable' referring to 'views'. Also 'for the simple fact that' is wordy; use 'because'. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches verbs and pronouns clearly refer to the intended noun.