视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more concise and natural by starting with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific reason and a brief example. Avoid repeating phrases like “look back.” Use a linking word to connect the reason and example.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photos help me preserve memories of places I’ve visited. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the seaside so I can remember the colours and atmosphere long after the trip.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid short, fragmented or repetitive phrases. Use a linking word to connect your preference and supporting detail, and give a specific example with one or two clear facts instead of vague praise.

範例: I prefer rural views because they feel more natural and peaceful. For instance, when I visited a countryside village last year, the rolling green fields and quiet lanes made the scenery especially relaxing.

建議: Give a direct answer and then explain with a clear reason. Avoid wordy or awkward phrases; be specific about how you see foreign views (travel, photos, websites). Use a linking word to connect your points and keep it to two or three sentences.

範例: I enjoy views both in my country and abroad because I love discovering different landscapes. For example, I follow travel blogs and Instagram accounts to see mountain ranges and coastal scenery from other countries, which inspires me to plan future trips.

× Yes, I like photographing different views as it allows me to look back, to have something to look back on in the future and see how beautiful earth is.

✓ Yes, I like photographing different views, as it allows me to look back and have something to refer to in the future and see how beautiful the earth is.

The original sentence contains awkward parallel structure and a missing article before 'earth'. Combining the two 'to look back' phrases into a single coordinated verb phrase ('to look back and have something to refer to') improves clarity and flow. Also, 'earth' as a specific planet here requires the definite article 'the'. Keep verbs parallel after 'to' for grammatical consistency.

× I prefer views in rural areas because they're more natural and less artificial. I once visited a rural area and the greenery was the scenic beauty was amazing.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they're more natural and less artificial. I once visited a rural area, and the greenery and scenic beauty were amazing.

The second sentence had a duplication and broken structure ('the greenery was the scenic beauty was amazing'). It should coordinate the two nouns 'greenery' and 'scenic beauty' with 'and' and use the plural verb 'were' to agree with the compound subject. Adding a comma before 'and' clarifies the clause boundary.

× I prefer views in not just my country but also other countries because I'm a lover of nature and it's beauty.

✓ I prefer views not just in my country but also in other countries because I'm a lover of nature and its beauty.

The phrase 'in not just my country but also other countries' has incorrect word order; 'not just' should modify 'in my country' so it becomes 'not just in my country but also in other countries'. Also, 'it's' is a contraction for 'it is' and is incorrect here; the possessive pronoun 'its' is required to mean 'the beauty of nature.' Fixing both issues corrects meaning and grammar.

× So I love scenes from all across the globe and especially when I'm surfing on the Internet, that's when I get a glimpse of the other countries.

✓ So I love scenes from all across the globe, and especially when I'm surfing the Internet, I get a glimpse of other countries.

The original sentence is wordy and contains a comma splice and awkward clause placement ('especially when I'm surfing on the Internet, that's when I get...'). Removing 'on' after 'surfing' (common collocation is 'surfing the Internet') and making the clause 'especially when I'm surfing the Internet, I get a glimpse of other countries' avoids the comma splice and improves clarity. Also 'the other countries' is unnecessarily specific; 'other countries' is more natural here.