视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and communicates your ideas, but there are repetition and minor grammatical errors. Make your response more natural by using a clear topic sentence, avoiding repetition, fixing grammar (plural/singular, articles), and keeping it within 3–4 concise sentences. Add one specific detail to make it more vivid.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views when I travel. It helps me remember the places I visit, and I often share photos with friends on social media. For example, I like capturing city skylines and coastal sunsets because they bring back strong memories.

建議: The answer has meaningful content but is disfluent with many hesitations and some grammatical mistakes. Start with a direct topic sentence (I prefer rural areas), avoid repeating words, use linking words to structure reasons (for example, because/so), correct grammar (fresh air, it makes me feel relaxed), and give one concrete example or detail.

範例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy wide open landscapes and fresh air. For example, rural Wales with its mountains and rivers makes me feel relaxed and peaceful, especially when I go for long walks in the countryside.

建議: Your idea is clear but pronunciation/word choice errors and repetitions reduce clarity (e.g., ‘wheels’ instead of ‘wales’ or ‘views’). Use a concise topic sentence (I prefer views in my own country), correct grammar (places, I want to visit), and link reasons (because/also). Add a specific example of a place you want to see to make the answer more concrete.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I’m familiar with the scenery and it makes me feel proud. For instance, there are many regions I haven’t visited yet, such as the northern coast, and I look forward to photographing its cliffs and beaches.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different views when I travel.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views when I travel.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'different views' implies multiple images; countable nouns that refer to more than one require plural form. Suggestion: use 'pictures' when talking about more than one photo.

× It helps me remember the place and I often share the share the picture with my friends online.

✓ It helps me remember the place and I often share the pictures with my friends online.

There is an accidental repetition 'share the share the' and 'picture' should be plural to match 'friends' and the idea of multiple images. This is a sentence structure/wording error. Suggestion: remove the duplicated words and use plural 'pictures'.

× Yes, I prefer rural Wales because I because I I enjoy looking at the mountains and the rivers so there are fresh air and it, it makes me feel relaxed and.

✓ Yes, I prefer rural Wales because I enjoy looking at the mountains and the rivers; the air is fresh and it makes me feel relaxed.

Multiple issues: repeated phrases 'because I because I I' are disfluent and should be removed (sentence structure). 'There are fresh air' is incorrect because 'air' is uncountable and requires 'the air is fresh' rather than 'there are'. Also remove the extra 'it, it' and the trailing 'and.' Suggestion: eliminate repetitions, treat 'air' as uncountable, and use a clear clause structure (use a semicolon or conjunction).

× I prefer wheels in my own country because I know the scenery here better.

✓ I prefer Wales in my own country because I know the scenery here better.

The original 'wheels' appears to be a typo for 'Wales' or 'views'. If the student meant the country 'Wales', use that proper noun spelled correctly. If they meant 'views', use the plural 'views'. Suggestion: correct spelling to match intended meaning; for country name use 'Wales'.

× It makes me feel comfortable and and proud.

✓ It makes me feel comfortable and proud.

There is a duplicated word 'and and' causing a disfluent sentence. Remove the extra 'and' to correct the structure. Suggestion: read aloud to catch duplicated words and remove one.

× I there are still many many place I haven't visited yet, so I wanted to.

✓ There are still many places I haven't visited yet, so I want to.

'Place' must be plural 'places' to match 'many'. The sentence misuses 'I there are'—the correct order is 'There are'. Also tense mismatch: 'I wanted to' implies past desire but context suggests present intent, so use 'I want to.' Suggestion: order the clause as 'There are many places' and use present tense 'I want to' for current plans.