视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be natural and concise: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition and hesitations, and correct small grammar and word choice errors. For example, say when you started and why it appeals to you, using one linking phrase to add a detail. Also keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I do. I have loved taking photographs since childhood because it helps me capture peaceful scenes. For instance, I enjoy photographing rivers and trees, which always give me a calm, reflective feeling.

建議: Answer directly with correct grammar and add a specific reason and example. Use a linking word such as "because" or "for example" to make your response coherent. Avoid filler words like "umm" and plural/singular mistakes.

範例: I prefer rural areas because they offer more natural variety, such as fields, rivers and traditional houses. For example, when I visit villages I can photograph sunrise over paddy fields and old wooden bridges, which give me many different shots.

建議: Be confident and precise: state your preference clearly, avoid vague comparative claims, remove hesitations and filler sounds, and support your opinion with a specific reason or example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I know the best local spots and cultural landscapes. For example, in Bangladesh I enjoy photographing the Sundarbans and rural boat scenes, which are unique and familiar to me.

× In fact I love taking pictures from my fairy childhood.

✓ In fact I love taking pictures from my early childhood.

The phrase 'fairy childhood' is incorrect word choice rather than a verb form error; however it likely intended 'early childhood'. This is a lexical/word-choice correction to convey meaning clearly. Use 'early childhood' to refer to the beginning years of life. Note: This item does not exactly match the listed grammar types but is corrected to preserve meaning.

× It has been my hobby to take pictures of different views and it it gives me serene feeling to be honest.

✓ Taking pictures of different views has been my hobby, and it gives me a serene feeling, to be honest.

The original sentence has repetition ('it it') and awkward word order. Rewriting places the subject first ('Taking pictures...'), uses present perfect 'has been' correctly, removes the repeated word, and adds articles ('a serene feeling'). Also insert commas for clarity.

× Umm actually I prefer a rural areas because it has a lot to offer.

✓ Umm, actually I prefer rural areas because they have a lot to offer.

The error mixes the indefinite article 'a' with the plural 'areas'. Remove 'a' and make verbs/pronouns agree with plural 'areas' ('they have'). Also include a comma after 'Umm' for natural speech pauses.

× I do not run out of pictures or topics or anything when it comes to rural areas.

✓ I do not run out of pictures, topics, or anything when it comes to rural areas.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but benefits from adding commas for list clarity. No subject-verb disagreement; punctuation improves readability.

× Actually, I prefer views in my own country as I live in Bangladesh now.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in my own country because I live in Bangladesh now.

'As' is acceptable but can be ambiguous; 'because' more clearly indicates reason. This change improves clarity; pronouns are correct.

× So I, I think, uh, Bangladesh cannot beat any other country, uh, in terms of their scenic, uh.

✓ So, I think Bangladesh cannot be beaten by any other country in terms of its scenery.

The original has pauses and incorrect pronoun agreement ('their' referring to Bangladesh singular). Use passive or active with correct singular possessive 'its'. 'Scenery' is the correct noun form rather than 'scenic'. Remove filler sounds and extra commas for a cleaner sentence.