视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm, mmm), and clarify your meaning—say whether you enjoy photographing landscapes, cityscapes, or cultural scenes. Add a brief specific reason or example using a linking word (for example, because…).

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views from around the world. For example, I like capturing city skylines and rural landscapes because they show unique architecture and local life. When I travel to a new country, I focus on landmarks and street scenes to remember the culture.

建議: Open with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give a specific reason and a brief example. Use linking words (because, since, however) to connect ideas and avoid repetition (don’t repeat 'area' too often).

範例: I prefer urban views because living in the city offers varied architecture and lively street scenes. For instance, I enjoy photographing modern glass buildings and busy markets, which contrast with the quiet landscapes I knew in the countryside.

建議: Give a clear direct answer first, then explain why with a specific detail. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (use singular/plural correctly: 'my country' not 'my countries'). Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to make the explanation coherent.

範例: I usually prefer views in other countries because they often offer scenes that are different from what I see at home. For example, when I travel abroad I enjoy unique architecture and cultural festivals that I can't find in my country.

× Yes, I like to take umm pictures from different countries and especially that the country will only learn on media.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures in different countries, especially countries that I only learn about through the media.

Use of prepositions was incorrect: 'take pictures from different countries' should be 'take pictures in different countries' to indicate location. 'that the country will only learn on media' is ungrammatical and misuses prepositions and clause structure; correct form is 'countries that I only learn about through the media.' 'Learn about' is the correct verb-preposition combination and 'through the media' is the appropriate preposition for source of information. Also remove filler words like 'umm' for clarity.

× I would say urban area because I used to live in rural areas, but I moved to urban area and I really enjoyed the views.

✓ I would say urban areas because I used to live in rural areas, but I moved to an urban area and I really enjoy the views.

Mixed singular/plural and tense issues: 'urban area' and 'rural areas' should match logically. Use 'urban areas' when speaking generally, or use 'an urban area' when referring to a specific move. Also change 'enjoyed' to 'enjoy' to match current preference. The corrected sentence uses 'an urban area' for the move and keeps 'rural areas' plural. This fixes number agreement and maintains present tense for ongoing enjoyment.

× MMM umm, I think it depends where I travel, but mostly I like foreign countries more than my own countries.

✓ I think it depends on where I travel, but mostly I prefer foreign countries to my own country.

Errors: 'depends where I travel' needs the preposition 'on' (see previous correction for prepositions). 'my own countries' is incorrect because a speaker normally has one home country; use singular 'my own country.' Also 'like X more than Y' is better expressed as 'prefer X to Y' for clarity. Removed filler sounds 'MMM umm' and adjusted comparative phrasing for correctness.