视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g. “different news”, “front countries”, “ways of nurture”). Use simple, correct vocabulary like “scenery”, “countries”, and reduce filler words.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I travel to other countries I often photograph natural scenery such as mountains and forests, and I also capture cultural scenes like traditional markets. These images help me remember the places and their atmosphere.

建議: Give a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific, logical reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear or incorrect phrases (e.g. “it's not church”, “risk your life”). Use connecting words such as “because”, “for example”, or “also” to make your answer coherent.

範例: I prefer rural areas because they are quieter and full of natural scenery. For example, I like seeing green fields and trees, which make me feel relaxed and refreshed. Also, rural landscapes offer peaceful photo subjects that are different from busy urban streets.

建議: Give one clear preference and explain why with specific comparisons. Use linking words like “however”, “because”, or “on the other hand”. Avoid repetition and unclear grammar. Mention concrete differences between your country and other countries to make your answer more informative.

範例: I generally prefer views in other countries because they often have more unspoilt natural scenery. In my country, many areas are urban and crowded, while abroad I have seen extensive countryside and dramatic coastlines, which I find more interesting to photograph.

× Yes, I like taking the pictures from different news when I when I go to the front countries and different cultures, there are so many ways of nurture like trees and mountains and yeah like that.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views when I travel to foreign countries and experience different cultures; there are so many kinds of natural scenery like trees and mountains.

Original sentence misused 'taking the pictures from different news' and 'front countries' which are incorrect noun choices and unclear. 'Taking pictures of' is the correct verb + preposition collocation for photography. 'When I travel to foreign countries' fits intended meaning and tense. 'Kinds of natural scenery' replaces 'ways of nurture' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct collocations (take pictures of, travel to) and precise nouns (foreign countries, scenery).

× I prefer rural rural areas because it's not church.

✓ I prefer rural areas because it's not crowded.

The phrase 'it's not church' is incorrect; likely the student meant 'not crowded'. Also repeating 'rural' is redundant. Use 'rural areas' without the definite article and a suitable adjective 'not crowded'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and choose appropriate adjectives that convey meaning.

× It give you a life for place.

✓ They give you a sense of life in a place.

Subject pronoun and verb agreement: 'It give' is wrong. 'They' (views/scenes) require 'give'. The original noun phrase 'a life for place' is ungrammatical; 'a sense of life in a place' conveys intended meaning. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use idiomatic expressions like 'a sense of'.

× It's affect yourself from inside with the with the good scenes and you see trees everywhere is green.

✓ They affect you from the inside with beautiful scenes, and you see trees everywhere; it is green.

Pronoun and agreement errors: 'It's affect yourself' mixes singular and plural forms and uses reflexive pronoun incorrectly. 'They' (scenes) should be subject with verb 'affect', and object should be 'you' not 'yourself' here. Also 'is green' needs a subject; 'it is green' or 'everything is green'. Suggestion: match subjects and verbs and use correct object pronouns.

× It's like risk your life in a good way.

✓ It feels like taking a risk in a positive way.

Original sentence 'risk your life' is awkward and potentially misleading. 'It feels like taking a risk in a positive way' maintains intended figurative meaning. Suggestion: rephrase idiomatic expressions and ensure proper verb forms ('feels like taking').

× Or sometimes I prefer my country, sometimes I prefer other countries.

✓ Sometimes I prefer my country; sometimes I prefer other countries.

Redundant 'Or' at start is unnecessary in this context. Use parallel clauses with consistent tense. Suggestion: remove filler words and keep balanced structure.

× But anyway, I prefer outside countries because it's like have more natural from my country, my country, like it's likes, uh, everywhere downtown, but outside, uh, there's more countries that have more natural.

✓ But anyway, I prefer other countries because they have more natural areas than my country; my country is mostly downtown, while other places have more nature.

Multiple pronoun and noun errors: 'outside countries' is unidiomatic; use 'other countries'. 'It's like have more natural from my country' is ungrammatical—use 'they have more natural areas than my country'. Repetition 'my country, like it's likes' is filler and incorrect. Suggestion: simplify and compare using 'than' for comparison and use plural agreement for 'they/have'.