视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitations and repetition, give a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural and under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. In particular, when I travel I focus on scenes with people because they help tell a story and capture the atmosphere. For example, a market scene with vendors and shoppers can remind me of the sounds and smells of that place.

建議: State your preference directly and support it with specific reasons and a concise example. Avoid vague phrases and filler words; use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: I prefer urban views because city scenes are full of life and stories. For example, narrow streets with street food stalls and commuters create dynamic photos that show how people live and interact in the city.

建議: Be decisive and provide concrete specifics and a brief reason. Use vivid vocabulary instead of fillers and keep to two or three sentences.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because China has such diverse natural landscapes. For instance, the towering mountains and winding rivers in places like Guilin offer dramatic scenery that I find more memorable than many foreign locations.

× Definitely, I like, uh, taking pictures and, and photos.

✓ Definitely, I like taking pictures and photos.

Unnecessary repetition and filler 'uh' disrupt fluency; remove duplicate 'and' and fillers. Use 'taking pictures and photos' with the gerund 'taking' correctly used for liking an activity.

× I like photography so much, especially when I go traveling, I like to take pictures where, uh, the people in the scenery could really tell a story of what they are doing that, uh, the pictures can help me remember the atmospheres and.

✓ I like photography so much, especially when I travel; I like to take pictures where the people and the scenery can really tell a story about what they are doing, and the pictures can help me remember the atmosphere.

Multiple issues: 'go traveling' is less natural than 'travel' (present tense habit), use of 'could' should be 'can' for general ability (present tense), unnecessary filler 'uh' removed, sentence fragment ending with 'and' fixed by completing clause, 'atmospheres' should be singular 'atmosphere' when referring to a scene. Ensure parallel structure and correct gerund/infinitive usage.

× Well, I always prefer sceneries in the, uh, urban area, especially in the city because it's, even though it's small, it's crowded, but the people that really matters and storytelling and it gives me the, uh, atmosphere and it's really interesting.

✓ Well, I always prefer urban scenery, especially in the city, because although it is small and crowded, the people really matter and the stories they tell give me atmosphere; it's really interesting.

Use 'scenery' (uncountable) not 'sceneries'; 'urban area' -> 'urban' or 'urban areas' without 'the' here; remove filler 'uh'; subject-verb agreement: 'people... matter' (plural) not 'matters'; clarify 'storytelling' to 'the stories they tell' and remove extra articles; fix punctuation and sentence structure for clarity.

× Well, it depends, but I believe, uh, I'll still prefer the scenery in my own country because China is famous for its extraordinary, uh, mountains, rivers, and, uh, sea views.

✓ Well, it depends, but I believe I will still prefer the scenery in my own country because China is famous for its extraordinary mountains, rivers, and sea views.

Remove filler 'uh'; 'I'll still prefer' is acceptable but ensure consistency by using 'I will still prefer'; no commas needed around 'I believe'; remove unnecessary commas; 'sea views' is fine. Maintain future preference with 'will' and keep tense consistent.

× It's breathtaking.

✓ It is breathtaking.

Contraction is acceptable in speech; change to full form to match written tone. No grammatical error beyond style; kept as present simple describing a general truth.