视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce fillers (uh, umm), correct grammar (taking photos, helped → helps or helps me remember), and give one specific supporting detail. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, I often photograph my family during weekend outings to capture candid smiles and interactions, so I can look back on those memories later.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence with correct grammar and avoid repetition. Explain specific reasons with linking words (because, for example). Replace vague adjectives (elegant) with concrete details (skyscrapers, cafes, transport). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy and architecture of cities. For example, tall buildings, lively streets and easy access to cafes and public transport make the urban scene feel convenient and visually interesting to me.

建議: Start with a direct answer and then add a specific reason using correct grammar and formal vocabulary (want to, curious about). Provide one concrete example of what you would like to see abroad. Remove fillers and repetitions.

範例: I prefer the views in my own country because they feel familiar and meaningful to me. However, I would like to visit other countries to see famous landscapes like the Alps or coastal towns, since I am curious about different cultures and natural scenery.

× Yes, of course I enjoy taking photo of different views in daily life because umm, it helped me remember, uh, each, uh, moment in my life. For example, I really love umm, taking a photographing my family, umm.

✓ Yes, of course I enjoy taking photos of different views in daily life because they help me remember each moment of my life. For example, I really love taking photographs of my family.

Multiple issues: singular/plural ('photo' should be 'photos') -> Grammar Problem Type ID 1. Verb tense/agreement ('it helped me remember' should be 'they help me remember') -> Grammar Problem Type ID 6 (present tense) and 27 (subject-verb agreement) because 'photos' is plural and requires plural verb 'help'. Redundant/incorrect word choice 'a photographing' -> should be 'taking photographs' (word form error, treated as verb + -ing/form issue ID 8). Suggestions: use plural 'photos' when referring to multiple images; keep present tense 'help' to match 'enjoy' and the habitual action; use 'taking photographs' or 'taking photos' not 'a photographing'. Remove filler sounds like 'umm' in formal answers.

× To be honest, I think I love the view of urban areas because it make me feel really elegant and convenient when I look at it.

✓ To be honest, I think I prefer the views of urban areas because they make me feel very comfortable and find them convenient to look at.

Singular and plural issue: 'the view of urban areas' is awkward; use plural 'views' to match 'urban areas' -> Grammar Problem Type ID 1. Subject-verb agreement/third person singular: 'it make' should be 'they make' because 'views' is plural -> Grammar Problem Type ID 27 and 2. Word choice: 'elegant' and 'convenient' collocation is odd; 'comfortable' or 'pleased' fits better. Suggestion: match plural subjects and verbs and choose appropriate adjectives.

× Also also it umm the view is very beautiful and I love it more than the rural areas.

✓ Also, the views are very beautiful and I love them more than those in rural areas.

Singular and plural issue: 'the view' vs 'rural areas' and pronoun agreement -> Grammar Problem Type ID 1. Pronoun/use of demonstrative: 'it' should agree with plural 'views' -> Grammar Problem Type ID 12. Suggestion: use plural 'views' and plural pronoun 'them', and compare 'them with those in rural areas' or 'more than those in rural areas'.

× I love my views in my own country.

✓ I love the views in my own country.

Present tense / article and noun choice: 'my views' is awkward; use 'the views' to mean scenery of the country -> Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 22. Suggestion: use 'the views' or 'the scenery' to refer to sights in your country.

× Also if I have a chance I wanna see the uh, scenery in umm another countries too because uh, I really curious about umm, the, the outside world that I have never seen before.

✓ Also, if I have a chance I want to see the scenery in other countries too because I am really curious about the outside world that I have never seen before.

Multiple tense and form issues: 'wanna' is informal and should be 'want to' -> Grammar Problem Type ID 6 (present tense). 'another countries' is wrong plural/quantifier: use 'other countries' -> Grammar Problem Type ID 1 and 14. Missing verb 'am' in 'I really curious' -> incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs/verb 'to be' -> Grammar Problem Type ID 13 and 3 ('there be' related not exactly but use of 'be'). Suggestions: use 'want to' in formal speech, use plural 'other countries', and include 'am' after 'I' when using an adjective 'curious'. Remove fillers like 'uh' and 'umm'.