视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Говорите более уверенно и избегайте заполнителей (например, "uh"). Сформулируйте прямое тематическое предложение, затем добавьте одно или два конкретных поддерживающих предложения с примерами. Упростите фразы и используйте более естественные выражения (например, "the beauty of nature", "the sound of birds").

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of nature. I like photographing trees, rivers and mountains because they show natural colours and peaceful scenes. For example, last week I photographed a lake at sunrise and captured the reflections and birds singing nearby.

建議: Исправьте ошибки грамматики и произношения, используйте связующие слова для логики. Начните с чёткого утверждения (I prefer ...), затем объясните почему с конкретными деталями, избегая лишних слов и повторов. Замените неверные слова (например, "waves", "ruler") на правильные ("views", "rural").

範例: I prefer rural areas to urban ones. Rural places offer quieter landscapes, like fields and forests, which are easier to photograph. For instance, I often find colourful wildflowers and clear skies in the countryside that make striking images.

建議: Уточните и исправьте неверные слова (например, "parish" — возможно вы имели в виду "paris" или "parish" неправильно употреблено). Дайте короткое утверждение и поддержите его конкретной причиной. Избегайте повторов и грамматических ошибок (will definitely prefer to capturing → will definitely prefer to capture).

範例: I prefer visiting other countries for views, especially Paris, because its architecture and streets are very romantic. I want to photograph landmarks like the Eiffel Tower and charming cafés, and I hope to do that with my partner on a future trip.

× Actually, I mostly enjoy uh, capturing photos of nature.

✓ Actually, I mostly enjoy capturing photos of nature.

Remove filled pause 'uh' to make sentence fluent; not a grammar error but disrupts formality. Use concise adverb placement: 'mostly enjoy capturing' is correct.

× Uh, the main reason is that it uh, shows the aesthetic form of environment and silent voice of birds.

✓ The main reason is that it shows the aesthetic form of the environment and the silent voices of birds.

Add definite article 'the' before 'environment' and pluralize 'voice' to 'voices' to match 'birds'. Remove filler 'uh'. 'Silent voices' is more natural. Ensure noun-adjective order: 'aesthetic form of the environment'.

× If I had a chance to choose one type of waves, I will definitely prefer ruler rural areas.

✓ If I had a chance to choose one type of view, I would definitely prefer rural areas.

Mixed conditional: 'If I had' (past subjunctive) must pair with 'would' not 'will'. 'Type of waves' is nonsensical here; use 'type of view'. Remove 'ruler' (wrong word). Use 'rural areas' as the object.

× The primary reason in rural areas has lots of aesthetic photos of nature that I mostly appreciate from this UH.

✓ The primary reason is that rural areas have many aesthetically pleasing natural scenes that I appreciate.

Correct structure: 'The primary reason is that...' Use plural 'areas have' (subject-verb agreement). Replace 'lots of aesthetic photos of nature' with 'many aesthetically pleasing natural scenes'. Remove filler 'UH'.

× I would say I will definitely prefer other foreign countries, especially London because it shows the beauty of parish and this means of love.

✓ I would say I would definitely prefer other countries, especially London, because it shows the beauty of its parishes and a sense of romance.

Consistency of modal verbs: 'I would say' pairs with 'would prefer'. 'Other foreign countries' is redundant; 'other countries' is enough. 'Parish' should be pluralized to 'parishes' and preceded by 'its'. 'This means of love' is unnatural; use 'a sense of romance'.

× In the future I will definitely prefer to capturing photos of parish with my partner.

✓ In the future I will definitely prefer to capture photos of parishes with my partner.

After 'prefer to' use base verb 'capture' not gerund 'capturing'. 'Parish' should be plural 'parishes'. Alternatively, 'prefer taking photos' could be used. Use consistent article and number.