视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 文を自然で明瞭にするために、発音の繰り返しや不要な言葉（“I I”, “you should be”）を避け、主題文＋1～2の具体例で完結に話してください。語順や冠詞の使い方（a picture / pictures）を正し、理由を具体的に述べると良いです。例：なぜ写真が記憶に役立つのか、どんな種類の風景を撮るかを一つ挙げると説得力が増します。

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photos help me remember places and moments. For example, I often photograph rivers and mountains when I travel because their colours and shapes are unique and memorable.

建議: 短く明確な主張（I prefer rural views.）を最初に置き、理由は2点まで具体的に述べてください。つなぎ言葉（because, also, for example）を使い、文法（there are not many buildings）と不必要なフィラー（UH）を避けて滑らかに話しましょう。

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because they make me feel relaxed and the scenery is simpler. For example, fewer buildings and more open fields create peaceful and photogenic landscapes.

建議: 最初に明確な答えを述べ、その後短い理由と一つの具体例を加えてください。言い換えや繋ぎ語（because, for instance, while）を用い、繰り返しや不要な発語（uh）を避け、文法（other countries, a very big city）を正してください。

範例: I prefer views in other countries because I grew up in Hong Kong, which is very crowded. For instance, I enjoy visiting rural areas abroad where there is more open space and less noise, which I find more relaxing.

× I I like taking pictures of different fields because I you should be using a pictures to help me memorize all my memories.

✓ I like taking pictures of different places because pictures help me remember my memories.

The sentence contains pronoun errors and redundant words. 'I I' and 'I you' are incorrect repetitions and mixed pronouns. 'a pictures' incorrectly mixes singular article with plural noun. Use consistent pronouns and correct noun number: 'I like' + plural 'pictures' and simple present 'help' for general truth. Also replace 'fields' with 'places' or 'views' to match the question context.

× And yeah, taking picture is really.

✓ And yeah, taking pictures is really fun.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match general activity, and the sentence is incomplete — add an adjective such as 'fun' to complete the idea. Use 'is' + adjective for a stative description.

× I prefer fields in rural areas because in rural areas I feel relaxed and mostly the UH picture are simple.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I feel relaxed there and mostly the pictures are simple.

Redundant phrase 'in rural areas' repeated; simplify to 'rural areas' and use 'there' as a locative pronoun. 'the UH picture' contains filler 'UH' and incorrect singular 'picture' — use plural 'pictures'. Also word order improved to natural English.

× There is no many, not many UH building in.

✓ There are not many buildings.

'There is' with plural noun is incorrect — use 'There are'. 'No many' is ungrammatical; use 'not many'. Remove filler 'UH' and place 'buildings' after the verb. The correct negative quantifier for countable plural is 'not many'.

× I prefer views in other country than my own country.

✓ I prefer views in other countries to those in my own country.

'Other country' should be plural 'other countries' when speaking generally. Use comparative structure 'prefer A to B' and 'those in my own country' to avoid repetition. This fixes number agreement and improves clarity.

× Uh, I'm originally from Hong Kong, uh, which is a very big city from However, uh, that city is too crowded.

✓ I'm originally from Hong Kong, which is a very large city; however, it is too crowded.

Remove extraneous fillers and the incorrect trailing 'from'. 'Which' clause correctly modifies 'Hong Kong'. Use a semicolon or comma with 'however' to join clauses properly and replace 'that city' with 'it' to avoid repetition. 'Big' can be replaced with 'large' for formality.

× I don't like that crowded scenery.

✓ I don't like the crowded atmosphere there.

'That crowded scenery' is awkward; native speakers would say 'the crowded atmosphere' or 'the crowded environment.' Add 'there' to specify location. This corrects usage and makes the sentence more natural.