视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is natural and relevant, but it is slightly long and contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, then one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "couldn't afford to buy one"), and avoid unnecessary background that doesn't support the main point.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I was a child I dreamed of owning a camera, but my parents couldn't afford one, so I only started practicing photography later; nevertheless, I still enjoy capturing landscapes whenever I can.

建議: This answer is clear, well-focused, and includes specific supporting details. To improve further, combine short fragments into full sentences and use linking words to make the response more coherent (e.g., "because, therefore, especially"). Keep within 3–4 sentences and vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., "scenery" vs "landscape").

範例: I prefer rural views because I love being surrounded by nature, such as tall trees, mountains and wildflowers, which create beautiful landscapes. Therefore, these places relax me and I often take photos to remember them, especially when I go hiking on weekends.

建議: Good direct response with specific reasons and examples. To refine, add a brief linking phrase to start and avoid repeating "these places" twice; vary sentence structure and vocabulary to sound more fluent (e.g., "coastal scenery" or "shorelines").

範例: I prefer views in my own country because our coastal scenery includes long beaches with blue water and white sand. As a result, I find them relaxing and ideal for walking or swimming, so I feel more comfortable visiting them than unfamiliar places abroad.

× When I was a child I dreamed of having a camera but because my parents couldn't afford to buy 1 so I didn't have a chance to practice my skills.

✓ When I was a child I dreamed of having a camera, but because my parents couldn't afford to buy one, I didn't have a chance to practice my skills.

Run-on and redundancy: 'but' and 'so' together create a redundancy and informal numeral '1' should be 'one'. The sentence also needs commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: remove 'so', write out 'one', and add a comma after the introductory clause and before the coordinating conjunction to improve clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Great beautiful scenery.

✓ There is great, beautiful scenery.

Fragment: 'Great beautiful scenery.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb. Adding 'There is' creates a complete sentence. Also add a comma between stacked adjectives 'great' and 'beautiful' for clarity and natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Being in those places relaxes me and I often take photos to keep the memories, especially when I go hiking on the weekends.

✓ Being in those places relaxes me, and I often take photos to keep the memories, especially when I go hiking on the weekend.

Preposition and article consistency: 'on the weekends' is acceptable in some dialects, but for a general statement 'on the weekend' or 'at the weekend' is more natural. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate independent clauses. Suggestion: use 'on the weekend' for clarity and consistency. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× These places relax me and are perfect for walking or swimming, so I feel more comfortable visiting them than unfamiliar places abroad.

✓ These places relax me and are perfect for walking or swimming, so I feel more comfortable visiting them than visiting unfamiliar places abroad.

Comparison clarity: The original omits the verb in the second element of the comparison, causing a slight ambiguity. Repeating 'visiting' makes the comparison parallel and clearer: 'visiting them than visiting unfamiliar places abroad.' Alternatively, restructure the clause: 'so I feel more comfortable visiting them than I do visiting unfamiliar places abroad.' Grammar problem type ID: 12