视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (articles, plurals, verbs) and avoid repetition. Aim for 2–4 sentences, e.g. say what kinds of views you like and why, and mention how you take photos.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I especially like coastal and cityscapes because they have dramatic light and interesting shapes. I usually take them with my phone and edit a little afterwards to keep the best shots.

建議: Give a clear direct answer then support with specific reasons and a linking word. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, countable nouns). Mention one or two concrete examples instead of vague negatives. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer urban views because cities offer diverse architecture and lively streets. For instance, I enjoy photographing skyscrapers, markets and waterfront promenades, which you rarely find together in rural areas.

建議: Answer directly and give specific, grammatically correct reasons. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example.' Avoid unclear words and names that don't add meaning. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and explain what you want to learn or see abroad.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because I want to experience different landscapes and cultures. For example, I would like to photograph historic European streets and tropical beaches to compare them with the scenery at home.

× Yes I like taking pictures of different sceneries big North Beach any aesthetically places builders.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different scenes, such as North Beach and other aesthetically pleasing places with interesting buildings.

The original sentence has several sentence structure problems: incorrect word choice ('sceneries' -> 'scenes'), missing connectors, and unclear noun phrases ('any aesthetically places builders'). Combine ideas with proper nouns and prepositional phrases. Use 'such as' to give examples and 'aesthetically pleasing places with interesting buildings' to clarify meaning.

× Personally I like taking pictures so everything luxury I'm in to take pictures with and I I enjoy having some views on my phone a lot mostly I'll or by phone so I enjoy.

✓ Personally, I like taking pictures of luxurious things; I'm into photography and I enjoy keeping many views on my phone.

This sentence is run-on and contains awkward phrasing ('everything luxury', 'I'm in to take pictures with', repeated 'I'). Break into a clear statement: 'taking pictures of luxurious things', use 'I'm into photography' to express interest, and 'keep many views on my phone' for clarity. Remove redundancy.

× I prefer views in cities 'cause I believe cities has the most wonderful views most rural areas there's no beaches, hotels and restaurants, so urban places has the lots of.

✓ I prefer views in cities because I believe cities have the most wonderful sights; most rural areas do not have beaches, hotels, or restaurants, so urban places have most of them.

The errors are subject-verb agreement ('cities has' should be 'cities have'), missing verbs in clauses and awkward phrasing. Use 'do not have' for negative clause and 'have most of them' to refer back to beaches, hotels, and restaurants.

× I prefer views with other countries because I've lived in my own country for quite my whole life, so I want to try something new reaches other countries to learn the difference and Alex.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I've lived in my own country for most of my life, so I want to try something new by visiting other countries to learn about the differences.

This sentence has structure and word choice issues: 'with other countries' should be 'in other countries', 'for quite my whole life' -> 'for most of my life', and 'reaches other countries' is incorrect. Remove the extraneous name 'Alex'. Use 'by visiting other countries' to indicate method and 'learn about the differences' for purpose.